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An observation or
question I received from
De Piero or a classmate:
How this
change impacts
my paper:
psychologist,
anthropologist, and
athletes
biological attribute
others might
I did this on my
last paper, I put
things instead
of just being
straight forward
with what I was
trying to say. I
tried to avoid
that this time
and mention
exactly what I
am going to
speak upon
instead of
saying things.
I will be using an
article called
Answers to Your
Questions about
Same-Sex Marriage
published by a
psychological website
I will be using an
article called Answers
to Your Questions
about Same-Sex
Marriage published by
a psychological website
called (American
I completely
changed the
sentence to
make sure it was
not too
repetitive and it
flowed a little
called (American
Psychological
Association) , I will
also be looking at an
anthropologist point of
view through an
article called Cultural
Anthropology/
Marriage,
Reproduction and
Kinship published by
(Wiki Books), and
finally I will be
looking at how gay
marriage
Psychological
Association) , a
anthropologist point of
view through an article
called Cultural
Anthropology/
Marriage,
Reproduction and
Kinship published by
(Wiki Books), and
finally looking at how
gay marriage is viewed
in the sporting world
better.
I will be focusing on
some rhetorical
features and
conventions like
audience, tone, style
of the paper (word
choice and structure),
as well as certain
language used in
general and how that
comes across.
I will be focusing on
some rhetorical
features like; audience,
tone, conventions,
authors moves, style
of the paper (word
choice and structure),
as well as certain
language used in
general and how that
comes across to get the
different views on gay
marriage from all three
articles and how each
author approaches the
situation differently.
I was not
specific at all
the first time
around so this
time I went
ahead and stated
exactly why I
was looking at
each rhetorical
feature and why
it was important
for my overall
essay.
Again, my word
choice was not
the best! SO I
reworded what I
could to make it
more
meaningful
I listed a few
The introductory
paragraph is so crucial
*for readers* because it
provides them with the
expectations for your
whole piece. The more
direction you give me, the
more focused *my
reading* will be --- and
the more I'll be able to
take away from your
piece.
each person to go
directly to the
evidence they are
looking for and
directly connect with
it without having to
read the entire article
each person to go
directly to the evidence
they are looking for
and directly connect
with it without having
to read the entire
article. Some subtitles
are, do same sex
couples make good
parents, or are same
sex marriages different
from heterosexual
marriages, this makes
it easier for the
audience to find
exactly what the focus
will be in each section
of the reading
examples of the
subtitles this
website had so
the readers had
textual evidence
about what I
was talking
about
I changed my
evidence
because I
realized I
misinterpreted
the first one so I
decided to go
back and pick a
stronger base
evidence so that
I was able to
state what I was
really trying to
state and prove.
My paragraph
did not really
have a topic
sentence so I
made sure to put
what my
paragraph was
going to be
about so that my
reader was not
lost throughout
it
I was confused
with the
sentence myself
so I completely
took it out and
restated what I
was really trying
to say