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Portfolio #10 I Believe Essay Rewrite

Sitting here, after a long day of drawn-out dreary schooling, I, a
sophomore in high school, am struggling to originate an elaborate idea for
my unwarranted English II essay assignment on my uttermost important
belief. Ironically, my uttermost belief entails schooling itself as a partially
unnecessary, and unrefined forced assimilation of time, learning style,
material, and peoples.
Forced into a system with unrealistic expectations, students are
expected to compete with one another by ascertaining their intellectual
strengths, and commonly weaknesses without consideration for time spent
participating in extra-curricular activities. Therefore, students being
measured by homework, and measured by test scores, and measured by
daily grades on the same time-frame remains un-complimenting to students
employed or participating in sports vs. a student without any particular
obligation Additionally, the active student loses valuable time for family,
friends, or the specified hobby due to an unbalanced amount of homework if
he/she wishes to also compete with other students. This creates a lop-sided
playing field for a supposedly fair intellectual competition orchestrated
throughout public schooling. No consideration is taken for the students who
go above and beyond in all aspects, not just academics.
Forced into school, not all students receive an education amounting to
their unique learning style. No consideration is taken for the distinctive

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learning pace, style, or preference any singular student prefers. Students are
shoved into a classroom of upwards 30 similar kids and expected to all learn
the same concept within the same timeframe regardless of other obligations,
while still competing ruthlessly for the glorified top 10% and recognition
among colleges.
Forced into seven classes of nonessential learning material a student
must achieve the highest possible grade point average of said subject,
without specific deliberation of the teenagers best, or favorite subject. For
example, Susie loves mathematics and teaching, but does poorly in science
class, therefore restricting her array of colleges with the most prestigious
reputations due to Susies incapability to preform exceedingly well in all core
classes, specifically science. Furthermore if a student aspires to become a
doctor when older, why should mandatory math classes be ordered upon the
student? Why should the student be compelled to work vigorously in a field
of study not pertaining to their wishes? While one could say this practice is
exercised in order to give students a taste of multiple fields of study, I still
believe it should be the students decision not a higher powers.
Forced into the assimilation of countless religions, beliefs, and
personalitys a teenager may lose sight of who they are and hope to become.
Judgement and gossip are viruses that feed off the school and all the
individual cells within it, or students. Therefore, forcing people to strain for
praise from peers, rather than personal satisfaction and confidence. Aspiring

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to be the same as everyone else, aspiring to be average, and aspiring to be

cool all because society tells students what the expected norm is.
I believe school education is outdated and un-personalized. Its flaws
are numerous, and actively affect students, teenagers in particular, within
the arguably most important years of their lives in a rather negative
manner.