How have you paid respect to screenwriting conventions?

I have created a world which is easily recognisable by using the familiar event of an anniversary. The characters drive is also obvious to the viewer as we can see he wants to turn the sound off to enjoy the anniversary, it seems he almost needs to as there are hints at mental instability, and there is an obligation to turn it down for his wife. It is clear what the protagonist stands to lose in this situation-ruining his anniversary, and losing his family relationships-, thus showing high stakes. There is one clear tone-dark, serious-, although at the start it is lighter, but there is still tension. There is a good use of visual language in the script-evident in the establishing shot, and the description of their clothes. Accompanying this point is the lack of dialogue, giving it a more cinematic feel. I have not written any camera directions, or character though/anything the audience cant see. Lastly, each scene adds information, thus increasing the viewers knowledge, of the character and their problem, as well as advancing the story.

How does the script adhere to the guiding principles of the TEN POINT PLAN? Title: Trailer Trash. (I do not have a final title yet). Genre: Black comedy, social realism Tone: Dark, serious Setting: A ground floor flat Main character: Adam a 30-something male Want/need/obligation: Wants to turn the noise down. Needs to turn the noise down for his own sanity. Obligated to for his wife, and anniversary. Opposition: His daughter, Chloe Catalyst for change: Loud TV Climax: A shocking ending of murder Resolution: An anti-resolution, as the noise is turned down, but at the cost of the daughters life Theme: Primarily noise pullution Audience reaction: Shock, and sympathy Does every scene reveal something new? Break down the scenes using the STEP OUTLINE to demonstrate how each is a consequence of the previous scene and in addition brings a new and significant development. Scene 1: What is revealed: They are a working class family living in a flat. Their costumes reveals elements of their personality to an extent, as Adam is prim and propr in a black blazer, whilst Chloe is clearly rebellious with a black skull and crossbones. Adam is preparing a celebration meal (an anniversary meal). Adam and Chloe have a troubled father daughter relationship, seen through her disobedience. Harleys

character can be seen as somewhat weak and vulnerable, as she comes in unnoticed. Adam and Harley are in a romantic relationship. Adam has anger issues, perhaps is even mentally unstable-we see this through his violent shouting and knocking. Harley is somewhat scared of him, but wants to protect him from himself-seen when she ushers him back to the table, trying to calm him down. Does the audience understand the theme: It is clear, through the violence that there is a theme of domestic abuse. The main theme can easily be identified, however, when the violence ensues after the noise starts. Significance to plot: Introducing the characters, their relationships, as well as setting up a significant amount of the story so far. We can see that Adam is angry because of the noise. We dont, however, know what hes going to do to Chloe yet. Scene 2: What is revealed: Choe is emmiting the noise through the TV. We see she is a pretty conventional teenager-messy bed, junk food. We also see that she is extremely rebellious, almost to the point of spitefulness, seeing how far she can push Adam-Try and make me, you fucking twat! I dare you!-initiating a challenge, and turning up the volume. Does the audience understand the theme: In this scene we can see the noise pollution increase, as well as the family relationship breaking down. Enforcing the themes of noise pollution, and broken homes. Significance to plot: It is a pivotol moment, as Chloe challenges the man, pushing him to his boiling point. Scene 3: What is revealed: We see, from the rummaging in the cupboards, that Adam is rather unstable. This view of Adam having mental issues is reinforced when he falls to his knees, showing something is not quite right. The meat cleaver helps emphasis his violent nature. Harley is trapped between her husband, and her daughter, as she feebly tries to calm him down. Emotions are clearly running high-after Chloes challenge-, and the climax comes in the form of murder, as Adam is pushed to his breaking point. Does the audience understand the theme: Again, domestic abuse is clear through violence. Also, noise pollution can still be seen, as the microwave adds to the noise. Significance to plot: It is the last scene, where every characters emotions are pushed to extremes. We see Harleys defence for her daughter, but overall the protagonist wins in the climax of murder. Does the narrative progress cinematically and with minimal dialogue? Explain how it progresses cinematically rather than with dialogue. How do visuals drive the narrative forward at points? How does sound drive the narrative forward at points? How are visual elements (e.g. aspects of mise-en-scne) used symbolically?

There is minimal dialogue, however some had to be used to push some scenes forward where visuals could not. Firstly, the narrative is pushed forward by visuals when Adam whistles, signalling for Chloe to be quite, resulting in her slamming the door. This is an instance where sound is used tod rive the narrative forward as well, as the wistle is used instead of a shout, and Chloe is talking on her phone, showing the first instance of noise pollution and Adams anger. A second key instance is when the coupl are sat at the table, he kisses her ring-showing they are married-, and jump once the noise starts. This leads to Adams second, but brief interaction with Chloe, and subsequently Harleys first sign of fear, as she does not sit down at first. The moment Harley puts her hand on her glass is another key moment, as it leads to Adams full on anger, and his first real sign of violence. Another key instance is when the couple are walking back from Chloes room, and a glass is thrown at their feet (This is also another instance of sound moving the narrative, as the microwave begins to beep), as it leads to Adam ultimate act of anger as he storms into the room and murders Chloe. The micro element costume is used symbollically to show the personality of the characters, as I have said earlier. Also, the props, and set design of Chloes room is used to convey a stereotypical teenager. The prop of the ring is clearly employed to show the relationship of the couple. The prop of the insect repellent is used symbollically to connote that Chloe is an annoyance that Adam wants to repell. The set design-the table-is used to convey the importance of the day.

Is there a clear tone? Describe the tone. Is it consistent throughout? The tone is rather serious, with dark undertones. Although the beginning is lighter, and the tone gets darker as the story progresses, serious tones can still be noted, especially between the man and the girl.