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What was the most significant day of your life? Why was it so important? (200
250 words)
All the days is significant of my life. All the days is very buatifull and
but and difycull days. All dreams a day buatifull and far.
The significant day of my life is a Monday when I and all my family
started to go to London. I wouldnt understand what is the London.
Am 5 years old and I dont understand in language to English.
Anyway, started all my family to go in London. The plane was
fantastic and very big. When I go to London all the people speaking
in English and my dad understand to English nothing another with
my family. When to go to hotel all my family to sleeping and I.
The night going to luna park and all its a fantastick and wonderfull.
The English people its a friendly people.
I wish to go again to London why its the first country in the worth.
I love England.
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Examiner comments
Content Organisation An attempt at paragraphing but very weak organisation due to
language level.
Accuracy- Poor control of language with basic errors including simple sentence structure and
past tenses. Significant errors throughout, which impede comprehension
Range of Language - a very limited range
Appropriacy of register- Neutral register is appropriate for the task but too many errors
Task completion Task only partially completed. Too short. No reasons given for why the
trip was so important. Reader may have some difficulty reading this due to number of errors.
Grade = 5/ 25 (Refer)
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Which holiday resort in your own country would you most like to visit and why?
(200 250 words)
My country has a lot of nice holiday resorts but the holiday resort I most like to visit is the
Kerinia. Kerinia is the smallest city of Cyprus and it is in the north.
Kerinia is small but a beautiful and traditional city. The population is only about 30,000 people.
The most of the Kerinias inhabitants are Turkish because in July of 1974 the Turkish occipied the
Kerinia.
The Kerinia is a seaplace city but in the south of Kerinia they are a lot of mountains. So if you go
in Kerinia you can go in the sea but and in the mountains.
In addition Kerinia has also a lot of accient places. Two of them is the abey of Belapais which had
been builted by the Italics in the 15th century. The other is the Kerinias castle which had been
builted by the Bysanticks in the 10th century. In the castle you can see an accient ship, the Kerinia
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If you go in Kerinia you can visit the port of the city. The port is small and the only think you can
see is some fishing boats. Near to the port there are a lot of restaurants, cafes and bars. In Kerinia
there is a cinema, so if you go in Kerinia you have fun.
The Kerinia is the most beautifull and traditional city of Cyprus and that the why I would most
like to visit this city. I hope that one day I will can go.
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Examiner comments
Content Organisation It is clearly organised and some attention paid to cohesion. Overparagraphed.
Accuracy- There are several errors, most notably with spelling and use of the definite article.
However, these errors are generally non-distracting.
Range of Language- An attempt has been made to use a range of lexical items and structures.
A particular effort has been given to relative clauses
Appropriacy of register- consistent and appropriate
Task Completion The content of the task is covered fully and the target reader would be
suitably informed.
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Write a letter to a restaurant you have recently eaten in where the service was slow
and the food of poor quality. (100 words)
Dear Sir,
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Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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I am writing to complain about the poor quality of your restaurant.
First I and my wife come to your restaurant at 8 oclock and we sit at 8.45 this is bad
for a restaurant who say it have fast service. When we sit the waiter ignore us and
when it came he wrote other started. At the menu is write that the meal is good
cooked and it is exelent quality but it was over cooked and we cant eat it the soup
was very hot.
Not to mention that the bread was steald and it smell alfull.
At the end the prizes was very high for this service. I and my wife we never dinner in
your restaurant again.
Yours faithfully
Andreas xxxxxxxx
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Examiner comments
Content Organisation The content of the task has been covered and an attempt has been
made at organising a letter of complaint. However, cohesive devices are used incorrectly.
Erratic paragraphing. Errors in layout for a formal letter.
Accuracy / Appropriacy of Register- Significant basic errors in vocabulary and grammar.
No evidence of ability to use tenses. Lack of control and poor punctuation. Although the
errors are basic, they mostly do not prevent the reader from understanding the writers
intention. An attempt has been made at a formal style but significant errors throughout.
Task completion/ Range of Language . Basically completed but reader would have some
problems with lexis (eg started instead of starter, steald instead of stale, alfull instead of
awful) Overall effect on the target reader would be negative.
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