Jake Van Pelt

7/25/16
ENC 2135

Prior to the workshop, my main concerns were regarding the clarity of the
genres I selected and about the methods by which I explained them. With my first
draft looking more like the frame of a ship than an actual ship, the level of quality of
the entire work is still relatively hard to determine as it didnt have any actual
citations yet, but I did indicate where I plan to insert them later on (as I thought
back to passages from the sources that I could quote. I was also a bit worried about
how the structuring of my intro was. After the workshop today, I understand that I
need to better explain which field of the medical program I intend to go into and
why, to give my paper some personality. Aside from the lack of proper inline
citations, the major point of fault was that my tone throughout the paper was rather
monotonous and hence, the paper was perhaps boring. This shall be one of the
primary genre conventions that I shall seek to change in my second draft to make
the project seem more like a description involving what I want to be a part of (hence
I should be enthusiastic about) and less like a droning patient report, of simply
throwing out information for the reader to interpret however they wish. My plan to
revise this is A, sit down at about 2PM to start as opposed to 10PM or later, and B,
to take plenty of time to reread what I wrote, (especially concerning that Im writing
an additional two thirds of the paper that I wasnt given feedback on. Nonetheless, I
expect that I shall produce a document of hopefully, even better quality than that of
the second draft for project 1. I shall make sure my citations are correct and I shall
have an additional three sources to ring my total number of sources up to ten,
hopefully managing to quote from each one at least once.