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Sammy Fato
Mrs. Collins
ENGL 1301
November 29, 2016
What a Ride
Another semester zoomed on by only because good things must to an end, this English
1301 class has been one for the books. A class full of interesting people and a brilliant professor,
this semester went along swimmingly. This had not been the first attempt at a 1301 class, this
was actually my third attempt. As the summer was coming to an end with the fall semester
approaching, a feeling of cautiousness fell upon me. Since my last two attempts were failures, a
determination to pass English had become a new found motivation. Now with the end of the
semester here, a wave of calmness flows through my mind now that an understanding of writing
essays is now clear. There has been a considerable improvement in my grammar and sentence
structure.
Starting with the first major essay, a review essay about the first episode of a television
show called Stranger Things. A hastily made rough draft was brought to class on the first editing
day, unsure about how the rough draft would be commented on the one thing that made it unclear
was the grammar in the essay that still made it on to the final draft. In the review there were
multiple comma splices that could have been easily avoided. Even with a comma splice in the
first sentence of the essay, The entertainment company Netflix has been providing hours of
entertainment to millions of viewers for years now, last summer of 2016 they released a new
show called Stranger Things. Clearly those are two separate sentences that should not be one

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long sentence combined with a comma. The first sentence of an essay should be an attention
grabber instead of being long and drawn out like the first sentence in the review.
As well as learning to work on my grammar there was also the need to fix my sentence
structure. When it was time for the third and last essay, a rhetorical visual analysis over a picture
about the preservation of the Earth. The focus on the essay was mostly about trying to get the
word count when my sentence structures could have been looked over more. By the time for the
final draft to be turned in there were unclear sentences that should have been reworded. In the
thesis statement From the use of dark and light colors to the comparison of the hands in visual,
it shows the luring of pollution in the form of a seductive hand in the advertisement, the
preservation of land demonstrates that saving the environment will be a battle against
industrialized capitalism. Parts of the sentence like shows the luring hand of pollution in the
form of a seductive hand, should have been put in the last part of the sentence that way words
could have flowed more fluidly and appear more appealing to the reader.
At the end of this semester after my third attempt at 1301, it goes to show that there are
bounteous ways to succeed as long there perseverance. There was multiple things to learn from
this class, for example how to properly edit rough drafts with ratiocination and that peer reviews
are an enormous help when there is a great deal of feedback. This semester in this class has made
me feel prepared to take on the next step in 1302.