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It doesnt pay to fight City Hall. For example, my friend Josie . . .
Many intelligent people lack common sense. Take Dr. Brandon . . .
Predicting the weather is far from an exact science. Two winters ago, a surprise
snowstorm . . .
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Instead, provide examples of lyrics that support your claim, chosen from different
songs in the album to head off objections that your examples arent representative.
Watch the Animation Furthermore, see that your examples display all the chief features of whatever
on Selecting Examples youre illustrating. Dont offer a country as an example of a democracy if, despite an
election, there is only one party on the ballot and the results are all rigged. Consider
the following appropriate student example of someone suffering from depression.
Carl wasnt just sad. Nothing really bad had happened in his life. But he had
lost all interest in his past favorite activities. His skateboard had been discarded in a
corner of his room. He no longer bothered to play his video games. Simple things
like getting tickets to a rock concert seemed to be too much effort for him. Some
days he stayed in bed and missed his classes. Often he irritably snapped at anyone
who talked with him. Friends could easily see the difference in him when he shuf-
fled to the dining room, his head down. Without a doubt, Carl was depressed.
Number of Examples
11.3 How many examples will you need? One long one, several fairly brief ones, or a
large number of very short ones? Look to your topic for the answer.
Determine the best
number of examples to One Long Example: Topics where traits are combined in a single object
use.
The qualities of a successful nurse
The challenges of running a small business
The excitement of participating in a political campaign.
Several Examples: Historical trends or broader, more general claims
To show that parents have been raising children more permissively over
the last half century, a minimum of three examples are called for: one fam-
ily from 1955, a second from about 1985, and another from the present.
To demonstrate the different attitudes of Chinese and American students
towards school work, examples would need to include several different
children from each culture.
A Large Series of Examples: Very general or very important claims
To demonstrate that slang arises from many subcultures, examples of
many slang words and cultures would be required.
To demonstrate that individuals abuse Medicare, a writer would need to use
many examples to avoid the impression that the practice is not widespread.
EXERCISE
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Organizing the Examples 193
2. Explain why you would use one extended illustration, several shorter ones, or a
whole series of examples to develop each of the following statements. Suggest
appropriate illustrations.
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Ethical Issues
11.5 In writing an illustration, we try to show readers something truthful about our
understanding of the world. They wouldnt read what weve written if they sus-
Write so that your
pected we were unusually careless in our thinking or knew we were trying to
illustration is ethical.
deceive them. Deception may stem from prejudice, which causes people to dis-
tort examples. For instance, parents trying to talk their teenager out of a career
in acting will probably cite only examples of failed or struggling performers who
have miserable lives, and they will fail to mention many successful performers.
Such a distortion isnt fair to the acting profession or the teenager. Some distor-
tions can be outright lies. In the past debate about welfare, some commentators
wrote about people who lived like millionaires while on welfare. It turned out
the examples were falsified, and no real instances of such massive abuse could
be found. To avoid ethical pitfalls, ask and answer the following questions:
Am I giving adequate thought to the point Ill make and the examples
Ill use?
Are the examples supporting my point truthful, or are they slanted to de-
ceive the reader?
Could my illustrations have harmful consequences? Do they stereotype
an individual or group? Do they harm someones reputation unjustly?
Will my examples promote desirable or undesirable behavior?
Writing an Illustration
11.6 Assertions, unfamiliar topics, abstract principles, natural lawsas weve seen,
all of these can form the foundation for your paper. If you have a choice,
Prewrite, plan, draft, and
you should experience little difficulty finding something suitable. After all,
revise your illustration.
youve observed and experienced many thingsfor example, how people
Watch the Animation can be TV junkies and the ways students manage the stresses of college life.
on Writing an
Illustration
As always, the strategies in Chapter 3 can help generate some possibilities,
along with these strategies.
FINDING YOUR TOPIC Keep a journal noticing basic patterns or trends you have observed
or read about.
Brainstorm a list of observations you have made about the world.
Write down some main points you want to make.
Think about what impact you would want your paper to have on
readers.
Decide if you need one extended example or multiple examples.
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Writing an Illustration 195
Once you have your topic, you can easily develop your illustration.
Once youve picked your topic, ask yourself, What example(s) will work
best with my audience? Then brainstorm each one for supporting details. Use a
chart patterned after the one below to help you.
Assisting customers
Running a A Days Taking deliveries
Small Store Work Restocking shelves
Maintaining security
Cleaning store
Counting out cash and
Closing checking balance
Securing premises
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Writing an Illustration 197
SAMPLE
If It Is Worth Doing. . . .
Janice Carlton
Offers main point of
1 Everyone should keep a slogan in his or her back pocket to pull out illustration and clarifies
at difficult times. Mine may seem a bit ridiculous, but I have found it to that claim. Indicates
reason idea is important
be a life saver: If it is worth doing, it is worth doing badly. This slogan
turns my parents phraseIf it is worth doing, it is worth doing well
completely upside down. To be clear, I am not suggesting that anyone
should deliberately do things badly. No one wants to be operated on
by a surgeon whose hand shakes. Hopefully, accountants know their
subject and offer sound advice. Still, some activities are so worth doing
that the fact that we might do them badly is no reason not to take up the
task. Far too often we are tempted to give up art because our paintings
are bad, avoid writing because our spelling is poor, or avoid helping a
friend build a pole barn because we might make mistakes. My slogan Offers a clear thesis in
last sentence
reminds me that my possible failure is no reason to avoid a worthwhile
project.
2 Consider singing for a moment. Singing can be tremendous fun. Offers first example
A good song can lift the heart. Singing with others can offer a delight- Indicates importance of
ful sense of sharing. My only problem is that I have a terrible voice. It singing to reader
cracks, soars when it should sink, and rises when it should drop. Usually,
I hit the right pitch, but sometimes I have to wiggle into it as though it
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Provides detail to This poem isnt very good, I admit. No one would want to publish it. Most
illustrate point
readers may not understand how, feeling like Little Red Riding Hood,
I rush from place to place to avoid meeting stray wolves. None of that is
the point. When writing the poem, I felt in touch with my life while savor-
Ends by tying example to ing a creative joy. There is no reason to let anything get in the way of
main point such a delight, not even the poor quality of the resulting poem.
4 Of course, it is easy to sing in the shower and write poetry no one
Offers a third example ever sees, even if the results, to put it mildly, stink. What about where
that expands the point by
others are involved? Imagine my predicament when my big brother
extending consequences
called and asked me if I would help him put up a pole barn. Me,
Ipleaded, Im all thumbs. And I meant it, but somehow he needed
my help, so despite my complete lack of construction experience,
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Writing an Illustration 199
Ichanted my mantra three times and said yes. For a day I held up Uses narrative
organization
beams, sawed boards (sometimes off the measured line), and ham-
mered in nails (bending more than a few). But I did help my brother.
He said that he couldnt have done it without me; and while he prob-
ably could have built the barn without me, it would have been harder
for him. Besides, working side by side for a day, we got to reconnect in Ends by detailing benefit
ways that I hadnt thought possible. I also learned some construction
skills. Without being willing to help badly, I would have missed a tre-
mendous opportunity.
5 There are times when doing something badly is significantly better Offers a fourth example
that is the most serious
than doing nothing at all. Our local newspaper featured a story about a
yet in narrative
hiker who was miles from anywhere on the trail when he came across
another hiker who was choking on his lunch. What could he do? He
couldnt run for help. He was out of his cell phone region. And he didnt
know CPR. What he did know was that the man in front of him was
starting to turn blue. He pounded the man on the back, but that didnt
work. Finally, in desperation he pushed down underneath the mans
rib cage. The pressure popped something out of his windpipe and he
started breathing again. The point of the article was the importance of
learning CPR, the Heimlich maneuver, and other lifesaving skills. The
hiker, of course, knew none of those skills and could have done tremen-
dous damage, perhaps breaking the victims ribs. Clearly, it would be
worthwhile to be expert at lifesaving skills. But what should the hiker
have done? If he had just stood there paralyzed by his lack of expertise, Ends with important
consequence of principle
the man would have choked to death. Fortunately, he seems to have be-
lieved in my slogan and did what was worth doing, saving a life, even
if he did it badly.
6 There are lots of pressure in our culture to leave it to the experts.
We can listen to CDs instead of sing ourselves. We can call towing ser-
vices that are glad to change our flats for us. We can watch soccer in-
stead of play it. With so many skilled people, it is easy to be embarrassed Conclusion. Reiterates
general point
by our own lack of expertise and abandon everything except what we
do well. Unfortunately, our lives would be significantly poorer for such a
surrender. Instead, we would be better off adapting the adage that if it Challenges the reader
is worth doing, it is worth doing badly and step up to the plate at a soft-
ball game, grab a sketch pad and draw what we see, write a poem, sing,
cook a meal for a friend. In the end, we have nothing to lose but our
false pride.
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Discussion Questions
1. What is the writer trying to illustrate?
2. How is this particular illustration developed?
3. Why did the writer include a poem in her essay?
4. What does the paragraph on the use of CPR add to the essay?
5. In the last paragraph, why does the writer use the pronoun we?
STEPPING UP TO SYNTHESIS
When we write an illustration paper, we dont always draw
our examples from personal experience. As we reflect on a
topic, we may talk with other people and read various source
materials to broaden our understanding. We explore differ-
ing perspectives and determine the connections between
them en route to arriving at our own views and insights.
Prewriting for Synthesis Take, for instance, the topic of racism in America.
The Scholarship Jacket, Mommas Encounter, and I Have a Dream
(in The Reader) offer poignant illustrations of how racism affects peoples
personal lives. Reading these essays, drawing upon your own observations,
andperhaps questioning other students could lead you to an important
ISBN 1-269-98692-9
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Published by Longman. Copyright 2014 by Pearson Education, Inc.
Writing an Illustration 201
insight: for example, that racism can have personal effects that are very
different from the more widely discussed kinds of institutional discrimina-
tion. You might then synthesize others illustrations and your own to produce
a paper that presents this insight.
Planning and Drafting Your Synthesis Whether you draw on material from in-
formal resources, conversations, or notes from reading, the process for plan-
ning and drafting your synthesis follows a familiar pattern. Determine how
many examples you will use to illustrate your point. Check to be sure those
points fit. Determine an appropriate order for them and build paragraphs
around your key point. For example, if you were trying to illustrate how video
games interfere with studying, you might start a paragraph with data from a
source followed by your own personal observations. Sometimes in represent-
ing conflicting viewpoints, you may want to organize the paper based on those
viewpoints leading to the position you support the most. You will need to clearly
shift any changes in the point you want to make with effective transitions.
Getting Started
1. Examine the Reader essays on racism cited above. Then, drawing upon examples
from the essays and perhaps the observations of minority students you know, write
a paper presenting your own conclusions about the personal effects of racism.
2. Read several issues of a magazine such as Sports Illustrated or Working Woman and
determine what the articles suggest about American life. Then write an essay that
illustrates your conclusions and incorporates relevant material from the articles.
3. Pulling Off the Ultimate Career Makeover illustrates the way people success-
fullyadapted to economic change. Do your own research on how students and
Complete additional
others adapt to such change, and write your own essay that supports or disagrees exercises and practice
with Douglas Warshaws account. in your MyLab
ISBN 1-269-98692-9
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Writing an Illustration
Prewriting the illustration.
Identify and write the key concept or observation to illustrate by reading, talking to
others, or jotting down your own observations.
Identify your purpose.
Identify your audience.
Brainstorm examples and supporting details.
Select the most effective examples.
Determine if the illustration could have harmful consequences or promote
undesirable behavior.
Repeat the
process as
Revising the illustration.
necessary.
Collect peer responses and reread the illustration critically.
Check fit to the main point.
Add examples or details.
Cut what doesnt work.
Test organization.
Test for ethics.
Proofread.
ISBN 1-269-98692-9
Strategies for Successful Writing: A Rhetoric, Research Guide, Reader, and Handbook, Tenth Edition, by James A. Reinking and Robert von der Osten.
Published by Longman. Copyright 2014 by Pearson Education, Inc.