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Les Bohem on
a credited screenwriter of The Alamo, tackled his fear of the action scene
and found that he had the talent to reveal his characters true natures in
scenes that kept audiences glued to the screen.
DEVELOPMENT CRAFT
16. Who You Know: Shari Brooks 20. Independents: Creating Compelling Characters
By John Scott Lewinski By William C. Martell
The wave of reality television has washed all the good writing jobs The key to making fictional characters feel real is giving them true-to-life human
away, right? Wrong. Learn how Shari Brooks made the transition from reality traits. But, what if your character isnt even a mammal? Columnist Bill Martell
television to sitcom and back again. examines how the writers of Finding Nemo brought human-like emotions to
characters who live underwater.
18. Spec Sale Spotlight: Nathan Skulnik
By Rita Cook 24. Software Review Part Two: Which Screenwriting Program is Right for You?
Rita Cook examines Nathan Skulniks road to success; his spec sale, The By John Scott Lewinski
Hostage, and everything that has come before and after for this talented Creative writing software is slowly altering the way our industry develops its art.
screenwriter. Learn about the different story development programs on the market and choose for
yourself which one will take your script to the next level.
32. The Great Idea: The United States of Leland
By Kate McCallum 28. Youre Writing a Picture (so use picture-making words)
Making your ideas come to life onscreen is not a simple process. Kate McCallum By Robin Russin
sits down with writer-director Matthew Hoge to explore how he fought to keep To raise your screenplays description to the next level, you need to think in terms of
his ideas alive and made his dream of The United States of Leland a reality. specific imagesimages that evoke the theme and nature of your story.
36. Script to Screen: Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind 56. The Small Screen: The Fairly OddParents
By David S. Cohen By Rich Whiteside
Charlie Kaufmans latest story starts with a premise familiar to sci-fi fansa Now that there are entire networks dedicated to toons, only the best shows rise
love affair erased from a mans memoryadds surreal special effects and the above the pack by entertaining both children and adults. Butch Hartman (creator/
unique talents of Jim Carrey, and finally weaves it all into a complex study of executive producer) and Steve Marmel (producer/head writer) discuss the secrets to
the nature of real love. Just dont call it science fiction. the success of The Fairly OddParents.
68. So You Wrote a Great Screenplay. Now What? 60. How to Write for a Movie Star
By Graham Ludlow
By Staton Rabin
Selling your screenplay can be a long and arduous process filled with frustration
Think you know what movie stars look for in a screenplay? Think again! Story analyst and
and anxiety. But, as producer and screenwriter Graham Ludlow explains, knowing
writer Staton Rabin explains how she wrote a role that attracted the attention of some
the right steps and having a little patience can lead to that ultimate reward.
of Hollywoods biggest names and reveals for you her trade secrets so you can, too.
76. Meet the Reader: Conventional ClichsPart Three 64. The Hill With It: Writing a Thriller? Be Crazy Like a Fox
By Ray Morton
By John Hill
Ray Morton details the often-abused aspects of the Mystery, Thriller, Adventure
There is a thin line between an action film and a thriller. Veteran screenwriter John
and Action films. Learn what differences and parallels one might find among
Hill highlights the ins and outs of these often-stereotyped genres of fading quality.
these film genres.
Maybe you can find a way to spice them up.
Cover art courtesy of Touchstone Pictures, All Rights Reserved. PHOTO: Deana Newcomb
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of the works for which he is best remembered still resonate. Still funny. Still
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not so much to reach the modern audience as it is to tell a timeless story which will resonate across generations. Put Associate Editor Ann Klarich
your nger on the pulse of humanity, and you tap into the same sort of immortality that the work of Preston Sturges
has attained. So, the next time you are looking for inspiration, try tuning into Turner Classic Movies. The movies may Event Correspondent Deborah Dyke
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The second article that received a great deal of feedback was our debut of The Great Idea series. It seems
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Mike Rich had on the lm in his rewrite. A talented screenwriter who was discovered with his Nicholl Fellowship-winning
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the latter went uncredited after WGA arbitration. I know Mike Rich personally, and he is the most unassuming and
down-to-earth individual you could hope to meet in this business. I would like to take a moment to mention that Mike Debra L. Eckerling, Jay S. Grubb, Esq.,
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to fruition in screenplay form. After that, producers, actors, directors and even another writer helped that great idea Sally B. Merlin, Ray Morton, Staton Rabin,
make its way to the screen. While rewriting remains an oftentimes abused aspect of development, sometimes two Diana Saenger, David Trottier,
talented writers work can coalesce into one amazing lm. The critics agree: This was one of those times. Bob Verini, Rich Whiteside,
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Correction: In last issues article titled Adapting Big Fish, George McArthurs being credited as the character of Karl was
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Jesse Wigutow
Jesse Wigutow, writer of Urban Townie surreal. He was very lucid, talkative and charming. He didnt really
and adapter of Arthur Millers The Ride want to talk about the play much, which was okay with me, consid-
Down Mt. Morgan, has the distinction ering Id have to adapt it. Instead, we got to talk about his life, his
of having the most interesting prewrit- history in NYC, how [the city has] changed and such.
ing occupation to date ... Muppet fluff- Since that adaptation, Wigutow has written both his own specs
er. I graduated from Cornell as an and on assignment: I try to maintain a practice of doing both kinds
English major, studying Creative Writing, of work, and Id like to keep doing that as long as I can.
Wigutow said. After school, I got a job working on Sesame Street Perhaps his biggest spec sale to date was It Runs in the Family
where I would move Big Bird around, plug feathers back in that fell with Hollywood legends Kirk and Michael Douglas. Wigutow based
out, whatever needed to be done. much of that story on his own family experience.
Wigutow moved on to work at The New Yorker for a year as an For now, Wigutow is happy to write. He keeps the pages piling
assistant to the art director. After that, I moved to Chicago to work up with determined discipline. I do a lot of outlining to begin
on the CBS show Early Edition, he said. While I was there, one of with because its important to have an idea where youre going,
my jobs was to download all the scripts written in Los Angeles by he explained. You need to know where the end point of this
the writers. I realized that I could do the writing. story youre trying to write is. Even if [the story] changes, you
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he made his first sale a month or two after graduation with Urban out the draft.
Townie: That launched my career. Within a couple weeks, Brad Pitt Regarding research, the amount and procedure vary from project
was attached to it, and we soon had a start date. to project: For the Kitchen project, I worked in a kitchen for a
After Urban Townie, I had a number of meetings. Every execu- couple of weeks. It was easy to get a sense of the language and
tive and production person wants to meet the new writer. Most of culture. The rest was making a story out of it.
them are getting acquainted meetings, but I took one meeting and As for the future, Wigutow believes he will probably stick to
got onto a project called Kitchen Confidential, based on a New York drama: What Im drawn to is generally character-driven stories that
Times best-seller. That also had Brad Pitt attached but fell apart. are not very funny. Id like to write something funny, but I dont
Wigutows most compelling adaptation might be his work with know if I have it in me. I think dramatic character pieces are what Im
the great playwright, Miller. When I got to adapt The Ride Down drawn to instinctively, but its not what I want to do forever. I might
Mt. Morgan, I had lunch with Arthur Miller. That was somewhat like to write a scary movie, but Im think Im too easily scared.
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f thats the case, why am I constantly name and fax number from the shows and A sitcom writer sits in a room with a
meeting writers who work for these real- cover the city with resums. bunch of people pitching stories and jokes.
ity shows? Is it possible that the term For my first show, Brooks said, I sent a But, a reality-show story editor is sitting
unscripted is somehow a misnomer? Are resum to every show in town and got mul- alone in a room watching hours of tape and
those out-of-work writers still looking for jobs tiple interviews and multiple job offers. You pulling a story together from all of it.
because reality shows killed the TV market? have to be willing to take any job. Some Brooks and company at The Osbournes
On the other hand, are they just unwilling to people start as a personal assistant. have about three weeks to put one epi-
open their minds and lower themselves to As an assistant, Brooks worked on six sode together. For the episode that she
working in unscripted television? different sitcoms over a few years. That was working on at the time, she watched
Shari Brooks, story editor on the popu- eventually led to work as a script coordina- upwards of 90 tapes of 30 to 40 minutes
lar and groundbreaking reality show The toroffering her the chance to occasionally each. Thats an average of 3,150 minutes
Osbournes, worked in both scripted and pitch jokes and stories to producers. or 52.5 hours of tape she had to absorb in
unscripted TV and admits the transition I co-wrote one episode for Caroline in a three-week period. That doesnt include
between the genres was difficult but is hard- the City, Brooks said. Switching over was editing time.
ly impossible. difficult because its not easy making transi- Working on The Osbournes is surreal
While in the USC Master of Professional tions as a writer. People are generally cau- becausewhile watching all of this tape
Writing Program, Brooks interned at tious with writers looking to transition. Its Im living with these people even though
MTVs The Real World. She was then hired easier to pigeonhole someone rather than Ive never really met them.
after graduation as the shows night tran- allow him or her to write both comedy and In the future, Brooks would like to sell
scriber, putting in long hours logging the drama or comedy and unscripted. her own show. She could perhaps produce
days footage. After a few weeks of that Brooks then found herself back at MTV her own reality show.
hard duty, she transitioned to a day job as where she learned that The Osbournes pro- I also love the process of putting together
assistant story editor. ducers were doing a pilot for that show. sitcoms, she added. Having the audience
I eventually story-edited some episodes She got onboard and has been there for all there on shoot night is an experience you
during the season, Brooks said from her three seasons. dont get on reality shows.
office in Santa Monica. But, I really want- But, what does a writer do in a medium Id love someday to go back to long-form
ed to work in comedy. that is supposed to feature naturally occur- screenplays and perhaps write a novel down
Brooks left The Real World to find ring, non-fiction narratives? Is there any the road, but that will have to wait.
employment in sitcoms as a writers assis- room for a writer to create a story in an
tant, but how did she manage to get one of unscripted show? There is because what
the highly coveted writers assistant gigs? a scriptwriter does on any reality show is JOHN SCOTT LEWINSKIS next book, Alone in
Its really difficult to get a writers assis- the same as what any writer does all the
tant jobeven one as an unpaid intern- timesearch for the stories that arise in a Room: The Secrets of Professional Screenwriters
ship, Brooks said. But, once you have your everyday life. (from Michael Wiese Productions: Mwp.com)
first job and youve proven yourself, youll be Brooks explained: Its possible to put a
recommended and will move from show to show together if you know basic storytell- will hit shelves in late 2004. A featured screen-
show. The trick can be not being too good at ing. You cull the show from a huge amount writer at the 2003 Cinestory Script Sessions with
it because you could end up getting pigeon- of footage. The Real World helped to train
holed as a writers assistant. me for the story-editor job here on The his award-winning script Slabtown, Lewinski
Brooks recommended poring through Osbournes because I learned how to find, is represented by the management firm of
The Hollywood Reporter for shows that are track and develop the stories already present
picked up as pilots. Get the line producers in the footage. Benderspink in Hollywood, CA.
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athan Skulnik sold his first script word is his draft is amazing. I am just hop-
The Hostage not soon after his first ing they can get that movie going because it
spec made the rounds in Hollywood is a lot of fun, he concludes.
and was ultimately passed on by the stu- Since that sale Skulnik has had quite a
dios. It was well received by everyone in time working in Hollywood. He worked at Screenwriter Nathan Skulnik
town, but it was passed on because it was Buena Vista, Touchstone and Walt Disney
too small, or too period or too whatever, Pictures and was actually under contract that is the treatment, which can be any-
Skulnik says. So after introducing my writ- with them. I was one of three contract where from two to 30 pages.
ing on a more intimate, less high-concept writers working for them, and it was really Skulnik believes that as a writer you
story, I decided to try my hand at some- just about the greatest job in the world, are always working. As for watching mov-
thing that could be a great action film with Skulnik says. ies versus reading scripts, he suggests that
a great twist. While at Disney he worked on rewrites screenwriters get the scripts to all their
The Hostage ended up being just this and polishes for everything from Young favorite movies and then watch those films
kind of piece, and Skulnik wrote it with Black Stallion to Snow Dogs to Escape on DVD and read along. See how the
fellow American Film Institute classmate to Witch Mountain. On Escape to Witch words translate onto the screen, he says.
Kenwood Youmans. Mountain, Skulnik says he really learned a Notice how few words are used and how
The Hostage is about a family who gets lot because he and director David Nutter concise everything is.
caught in the middle of a bank robbery spent several months going over the script In the end, successful writing is really
that escalates into a hostage situation. page by page. I was really hoping we about what interests you as a screenwriter.
Used as a bargaining chip between the would get the green light on that one, but Dont just write movies about movies.
cops and the thieves, our hero is released, ultimately I think Disney felt our version Find the amazing things in life, the stories
against his will, from the bank, Skulnik might have been a little too dark. that are just dying to be told, and always
explains. The problem is his wife and Since working with Disney, Skulnik has keep your feelers out, he recommends.
daughter are still in the bank. The man been polishing a spec called Chrysalis; and When asked for his advice to other screen-
ultimately takes matters into his own he says it has been getting a very good writers, Skulnik offers a quote from a famous
hands, finds the family of the mastermind response from the studios. writer: Ass plus chair equals writing.
thief and takes them hostage. Skulnik says his outlining process is very He adds, The most important thing is
It took Skulnik and his writing partner haphazard. At first I get the idea; and when to believe you can do it. Sit down at your
about two weeks to write the story, another the idea comes, I know it, he explains. Its computer and put the time in because if
three weeks to write the first draft and then like a feeling you get. You get this amazing you love to write, there is not a better job
a few months to revise it. adrenaline rush. Then, in a flash, I see the in the world.
Our managers, Sean Perrone and Aaron entire movie. Then I spend the next five
Kaplan, sent [the script] out along with our months building on what I saw in those RITA COOK is the editor-in-chief of Insider
guys from United Talent Agency, Skulnik first seconds. magazine and also a producer and screen-
says. The morning after the script was Skulnik goes on to explain that he jots
writer. In 2002, she co-produced three films:
sent, there was an offer on the table from down notes; takes weeks to notice every-
Baltimore/Spring Creek and Intermedia. thing that he sees, reads or hears; and lets Schizophrenic, Gabriella and Lost Soul. A short
Skulnik and Youmans wrote the first few those things inspire him. I kind of become film, Quest to Ref, on which she was pro-
drafts along with executives at Intermedia an antenna, he says just trying to attract ducer, was recently selected at Sundance. Cook
and Baltimore/Spring Creek, but they were anything that might help me put this huge
is the President of Cinewomen, Los Angeles,
ultimately replaced. Well, not really, puzzle that is the story together. He also
Skulnik jokes. However, the truth is, They does the notecard process he learned from and President Emeritus of Women in Film &
did put a new writer on the script, and a writing instructor at AFI; and following Television, Chicago.
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our protagonist enters the world
naked. You dont have Jim Carrey
playing a guy who would remove
portions of his memory in order to get over
a heartbreak (Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless
Mind), or Billy Bob Thornton as Davy
Crockett trying to live up to his own legend
(The Alamo), or even Denzel Washington Marlin and Dory encounter a trio of sharks in their quest to find Nemo
playing a tough ex-Marine hell-bent on
revenge (Man on Fire). The role hasnt been to really think about who this character (story and screenplay), Bob Peterson
cast. Theres no actor bringing his personal- is before you sit down to write those 110 (screenplay) and David Reynolds (screen-
ity and performance to the page. All you pages about him. A little prewriting saves a play). The film made nearly $340 million
have is the characters name and a brief whole lot of rewriting. in its domestic theatrical run and then sold
sentence describing him: GEORGE is the an estimated $158 million in DVD and
most cautious person in the worldhe even THE SKIN JUMP home video on its first day of home release.
looks up before crossing a street. How do The cinema lights go down, and the People love this movie and relate to the pro-
we make sure a studio reader cares about movie begins. If the film is good, we jump tagonist even though hes a cowardly clown
your protagonist for 110 pages? How do we into the skin of the protagonist and live his fish. If youve watched the making of
keep that reader involved on page 73 when life for two hours. We worry about him, documentary, you know that making the
that single line of character description has root for him and feel his pain. His joy is animated fish human was a major chal-
long been forgotten? The reader may have our joy. His anger is our anger. His fears lenge for the Pixar team. Their usual bag
to cover a dozen scripts that week. How can become our fears. When the protagonist of tricks couldnt be used because Marlin
we make sure our protagonist is the one he is in trouble, its as if we are in trouble. We and Nemo didnt have hands with which to
remembers? have made that skin jump into the pro- gesture or faces in the human sense. Even
You need to know your protagonist well tagonist, and we are vicariously living his Mr. Potato Head has a nose! Its difficult
enough to write a brief, hopefully witty, life. We have stopped watching the movie enough to make the audience care about a
one-sentence description that sums up the ... we are living the movie. human being who will be played by a major
essence of the character. What he wears, We want to take the viewer and reader movie star. How do you make us care about
what color his eyes are, even knowing his inside our characters life. But what if the a fish thats only a cartoon?
educational and social background doesnt character is someone to whom it is dif-
really matter. Much of that will change ficult to relate? What if he is a villain? Or SHARED EXPERIENCE
with casting. What does matter is who a robot? Or a Hobbit? Or a fish? How can When Finding Nemo begins, cute, little
your character is. The purpose of story is you ever hope to get the reader to walk clownfish Marlin and his wife Coral have
to explore character; and if you dont know 110 pages in your protagonists shoes if he just moved into a larger home in prepara-
everything about your protagonist, youre doesnt even have feet? tion for hatching the dozens of eggs which
not going to be much of a tour guide for Last years most popular film was Pixars will become their family. The biggest con-
the reader and audience. Take the time Finding Nemo written by Andrew Stanton flict in their lives is naming all of those little
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onesthe boys will be Marlin Jr., the girls
Coral Jr. ... but Coral thinks they should
name one Nemo. By creating a situation
that we understand (family), we have a
point of identification with Marlin and
Coral. Creating a similar situation in your
script will open the door to your character,
but then you need to pull the audience into
your characters life.
Only seconds after we meet Marlin, Coral
and the eggs, a barracuda attacks their new
home. Marlin is unable to save his wife and
children. Everyone is eaten except Marlin
and a single egg (Nemo). Marlin feels
responsible ... and we feel his pain.
Emotions create a bond between your
protagonist and the audience. But hav-
ing the character tell us what he is feeling
doesnt work. You need to create an emo-
tional experience we can share. The deeper
that emotional experience, the more we
feel. Dont protect your protagonist from
physical and emotional danger. Always be
looking for the worst thing that can hap-
pen. Having Marlins family killed is bad.
Having his family killed because he failed
to protect them is worse.
ASSOCIATION BY GUILT
Nemo is the only family Marlin has,
his only chance at being a good parent ...
so he becomes overprotective of the little
guy. On the first day of fish school, Marlin
swims Nemo to class holding his fin the
entire way. He wants Nemo to play on the
sponges with the little kids and warns the
teacher that his son isnt a good swimmer.
When he finds out that the class is going to
the edge of the reef, he chases after them to
make sure Nemo doesnt get hurt.
Meanwhile, little Nemo has had his first
taste of freedom and adventure and loves it.
He and some playmates dare each other to
swim out and touch the bottom of a boat in
the middle of the ocean. When Marlin sees
this, he loses his temper and yells at his son for
putting himself in potential danger. He wants
to pull Nemo out of school and keep him at
home where its safe. A huge argument ensues.
Nemo breaks from his father and swims away,
and is captured by a scuba diver.
Marlin loses his son because he was over-
protective. Their final conversation was an
argument. Again, Marlin is responsible for
the loss of his family. Its his fault that
Nemo was captured.
You might think this chain of events
would make us dislike Marlin, but it has the
Finding Nemo written by Andrew Stanton (story and screenplay), Bob Peterson (screenplay) and David Reynolds (screenplay)
opposite effect. If a character makes a mistake and regrets it, we feel about to fail. We want the reader and later the audience to hope
sorry for him. Marlin had no idea when he argued with Nemo that the protagonist will achieve his goal but fear that he might fail.
those would be his last words to his son. Marlin thought he was Marlins goal becomes our goal. His struggles to find Nemo not
doing the right thing by being so protective, and now he realizes only bring his character to the surface, but they also make us care
he was wrong. Maybe he wouldnt have done it if I hadnt been about him. What if he cant find Nemo? For a skin jump to work,
so tough on him. Marlin needs to set things right and is look- we need to understand exactly what the character is doing.
ing for personal redemption because he contributed to Nemos
capture. We know how bad he feels, and that offers us a doorway WHEN PLANS GO WRONG
into the character. The bigger the guilt, the bigger the doorway. The first thing Marlin needs to do is find someone who can
Its because Marlin made a major error in judgement that we read the address on the mask. This is a small goal, a step in
identify with him so much. We all have things we regret; we all reaching the larger goal. The mask becomes a physical symbol
have loved ones we have hurt; we all wish we could take back for finding Nemo.
some action or words. We are really rooting for Marlin to find his Marlin finds Dory, a fish with serious memory problems but
son so that he can make up for his mistake in judgement. with the ability to read. Before Dory gets a chance to read the
mask, they are captured by a trio of sharks. When characters
HOPES AND FEARS are in danger, we worry about them. A compelling character is
Its not enough for a character to have a problem. He has to one who gets deeper and deeper into troubleput a baby on
do something. Your protagonist needs to be actively struggling to the ledge of a building, and were going to worry. Put the same
resolve the conflict. If Marlin just sat around the house feeling sorry baby in a crib, and we just think its cute. If you want us to
for himself, we would stop caring about him. Your protagonist care about your character, get him in lots of trouble. Make sure
needs a goal and a plan of action for achieving that goal. When the everything goes wrong.
boat carrying Nemo speeds away, the scuba-diving dentists face Several times the mask is almost lost, and we root for Marlin
mask falls off the deck into the ocean. On the masks strap: the and Dory to risk their lives and go back to get it. When the mask
dentists name and address. Now Marlin has a goal and a planhes is dropped into a deep trench, we fear that it is gone forever; and
going to swim to Sydney, Australia to rescue Nemo. Marlin may have lost his only clue to Nemos whereabouts. We
Your protagonists goal must be tangiblesomething that we hope Marlin and Dory can swim into the darkness and find the
can see or something that we can see accomplished. The goal is the mask. Even when they find the mask, there is still a chance at fail-
characters purpose in the story. So if a character has a vague goal urestill a major struggle ahead of them. The only light to read by
or a goal thats difficult to understand, your protagonist will seem is from a fish thats trying to eat them. While Marlin uses himself
aimless and possibly pointlessnot a good thing if you want us to as bait to lure the fish close to the mask, Dory reads the address on
care about him! Marlins goal cant be something like be a better the strap. Several times Marlin almost gets munchedhis potential
father because we cant see that. Film is a visual medium, and the peril involves us.
goal needs to be something we can see. Conflict that is easily or quickly resolved doesnt involve us. Its
The films title tells us the goal in Finding Nemo, but that scuba the struggle which creates suspense: Will Marlin be able to keep
mask gives us the plan. The sooner we, the audience, know the from becoming lunch long enough for Dory to read the mask strap?
protagonists goal and his plan for achieving it, the sooner we can You want to keep that conflict perking for pages! The best way to
become involved in the outcome. You, the writer, must commu- do that is to create a dilemma: Marlin has to choose between his
nicate the goal and the plan to the audience/reader, or we wont own safety and getting the address on the mask. When he swims
know what the protagonist is doing. We wont know when he is away from the hungry fish, it becomes too dark for Dory to read.
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HES ONLY HUMAN starts trusting his intuition, Marlin cant find Nemo unless he stops
Once Dory has read the address, they know where Nemo is ... being over-cautious. By the time Marlin gets to Sydney, hes become
but how do they get there? Marlins plan is to swim to Sydney, a legend: The little clownfish who fought three sharks, swam into
Australia; but thats many miles away, and hes afraid of the ocean. the deepest trench in the sea, crossed the ocean and swam through
Marlin is the most cautious fish in the sea, but he will have to swim a swarm of dangerous jellyfish. Marlin has not only conquered his
through dangerous waters to rescue his son. The story will force own fears, but he has also conquered his flaws and now can allow
him to confront his fears and deal with being overly cautious. Nemo to be a kid and play without constant supervision.
Look at your protagonists character flaw (emotional problem).
Does your story make him bump into his flaw? Usually a character MAKE THE READER FEEL
is in denial about his shortcoming. Marlin believes that being overly It doesnt matter if a character onscreen is emotional. What mat-
cautious is the best way to live, but thats what caused the argument ters is if those emotions are experienced by the audience. Bring us
with Nemo. In scene after scene, Marlin must choose to do danger- inside your lead character and make us feel what he feels. We only
ous things in order to rescue Nemo. When Marlin and Dory swim dislike people we dont understand, so show us their goals, their
through a minefield of deadly jellyfish, Dory gets stung and Marlin flaws and their fears. Strange as it may seem, character flaws, weak-
must decide to swim back into the danger and save her. This takes ness and guilt are the very things that create a bond between the
courage, and we worry that Marlin may not be able to rescue Dory reader and character. Vulnerability makes us care about characters.
and may even be killed. Involve us in your protagonists struggle to achieve his goal and
Marlin has to learn that his methods are wrong. Though he may make sure the obstacles seem almost impossible to overcome. If the
risk his life again and again to find Nemo, it isnt until hes hanging character has no chance to fail and doesnt constantly come close
out with Crush, the turtle, that he realizes his being overly protec- to failing, we cant root for him to succeed. Compelling characters
tive of Nemo was a mistake. Crush allows his kids to roam free and are characters struggling on every page with problems that we
learn by their own mistakes. He trusts them. Marlin realizes being understandemotional problems that are connected to the major
so protective is what caused Nemo to be captured. A characters conflict in your screenplay.
fears and flaws make him human ... even if he has gills.
Your protagonists character flaw is the story. His physical prob-
WILLIAM C. MARTELL has written over a dozen produced films for
lem (plot) should be created to force him to deal with this emo-
tional problem. He wont be able to resolve the physical problem cable and video, including the HBO World Premiere Movie Crash Dive
without resolving his emotional problem. Just like Luke Skywalker and the family film Invisible Mom. He is the author of The Secrets of
cant blow up The Death Star until he believes in the Force and Action Screenwriting. He may be reached at: Scriptsecrets.net
Part Two
BY JOHN SCOTT LEWINSKI
T
he fact may change in the future; It might just be thatat least in the cyber move into work on their own products.
but for now, computers cannot sense. The program promises to help any The Characters tile helps you to develop
invent stories. The human mind is screenwriter (either novice or expert) to and flesh-out your characters. The function
still the only force in civilization capable of develop characters, plots and themes into allows you to go much deeper than mere
creative imagination. Computers still think fully realized stories. name, appearance, sex or age. It lets you
too by the numbers to participate in the Dramatica Pro is manufactured by Write figure out the characters needs and function
invention of fiction. Bros., Inc. (formerly Screenplay Systems, with the narrative. Finally, the Character
But, that doesnt mean your Mac or PC Inc.), makers of popular organizing, plan- tile allows you to define immediately the
cant lend a hand in the process of creat- ning, bookkeeping, writing and development relationships between your charactersan
ing or developing your story. There is an software for motion picture and television essential tool because those relationships will
ever-growing selection of software products writers, production managers and line pro- invariably drive most screenplays.
aimed directly at the writer who needs ducers. Dramatica Pro is Write Bros. heavy- The Plot Progression command outlines
help in organizing and nursing his story hitter in the story development race, offering a linear view of a given storys through-lines
to fruition. the most graphically friendly interface. and plot points. Theme Browser gives the
Since many writers arent in convenient After gliding through an easy installa- user a 3-D look at a storys dramatic ele-
proximity to a film school or university tion program, users move to a tile-based, ments (characters, plot points, etc.), offering
extension screenwriting class, they often point-and-click menu screen that allows an overview of how they all work together
have to resort to books for their writing les- the writer to either start a new story or to build an effective script. If you see some-
sons. However, these software packages offer pick up analysis of an old story at any thing not quite working here, simply go
more interactive tools for building stories. point in its development. back to the main tile menu and fix it.
They provide basic organization tools that You can navigate through the StoryGuide The Query System offers a test to work
all writers can utilize even if they have years section that allows you to jump into a out where you want a story to go. The
worth of experience. quick start on your new story. The Open function asks a series of multiple choice
Story command obviously allows you to and fill-in questions. How you answer
DRAMATICA access a story on which youve been work- those queries will define how you will tell
PRO 4.0 ing in the past. However, it also presents your story. The most advanced Dramatica
Once known sim- the interesting opportunity to break down Pro user can go directly to the Story
ply as Movie Magic and analyze a pre-existing story (included Engine to access the master controls for
Dramatica, Dramatica in the software) with Dramaticas functions. creating a plot. This function lets you play
Pro 4.0 now boldly This option gives the less-experienced writ- with different possibilities and twists in your
describes itself as ers insight into how legitimate, big-time, story by shuffling the elements and seeing
The Ultimate Creative Writing Partner. professional scripts break down before they how the plot settles.
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Other features include: using the software. The package includes three CD-ROMs
s #LICK AND DRAG TO REARRANGE YOUR TIME- Then, once youve made your character, that start with the fundamentals, then intro-
line. You can rearrange any of your story mindset and thrust choices, you are ready duce each part of an actual film produc-
materials with standard drag-and-drop. to forge your conflicts. Storybase displays tion. You help the short film develop from
s -OVE CREATIVE NOTES FROM ANYWHERE IN BETWEEN AND SEVERAL HUNDRED CONFLICTS concept and research through production,
the program and organize your existing that best match your choices up to that editing and the final cut. The designers
story materials by adding your own folders point. Each conflict suggests different paths included raw student film footage on the
and cards. for your story. When you find a conflict and CDs (as well as script pages from the shoot),
s !DD EXTRA DEPTH TO YOUR STORY WITH 7EB a resulting storyline that you like, you drag- so you can edit the sample with your own
Links. and-drop or copy-and-paste it into most text software (including Final Cut Pro).
s 7ORK ON AS MANY STORIES AS YOU LIKE documents, word processors or your favorite The rooms that virtual students can visit
simultaneously. Each story can be saved screenwriting program. include:
on its own. Each conflict in the program is linked to s %QUIPMENT 2OOM /FFERING AN OVERVIEW
Finally, the program includes educational other conflicts that suggest ways your screen- of actual cameras, lenses, etc.
and explanatory video clips that should aid play can movein other words, where that s &ILM &ESTIVALS 2OOM )NCLUDING
in explaining key stages of the development conflict might lead. These leads show dif- researched information on where short
process. ferent ways your script might proceed from films can go to find an audience.
0RICE &OR MORE INFORMATION VISIT any point in your story. From there, you can s &ILM 'RAMMAR 2OOM $ESCRIBING
Storymind.com shape your story through the endless possi- the rules of filmmaking and the terms
bilities of your own unlimited creativity. involved.
STORYBASE When your story hits a wall, and you cant s &ILM (ISTORY 2OOM /FFERING A RELATIVE-
Storybase is an interac- seem to steer it in an effective direction, you ly brief but accurate look into the history
tive, user-friendly resource can play with Storybases seemingly infinite of the art form.
that can help screenwrit- combinations to see where your story could s ,IBRARY #ONTAINING AMONG OTHER
ers master the essential go. If the conflicts and scenarios that the things, research material relevant to the
art of creating conflict. software creates fail to excite you, delete and experts teaching the courses.
Not only does every begin again. s 2ESTROOM 9OU HAVE TO CHECK THIS ONE
screenplays narrative structure contain ongo- Available for all Windows systems, the out for yourself.
ing conflict, but also every scene in your software is downloadable from Ashleywildes The other rooms include a Research
script should have some internal conflict web site or on CD-ROM. Room, Scriptwriting Room, Pre-Production
of its own. Storybase employs an engine of 0RICE &OR MORE INFORMATION VISIT Room, Production Room, Post-Production
ESSENTIAL CONFLICT MODELSSUGGESTIONS Storybase.net Room and a Screening Room.
for dramatic or comedic interactions, scenes While the program may not be able to
and stories. HOW TO MAKE YOUR MOVIE reproduce the entirety of the film school
According to Ashleywilde who produces While not strictly a experience, its an affordable introduction
the software, Storybase works to aid your writing or story develop- TO PRODUCTION 6ERSION WHICH WAS NOT
creative inspiration and your craft, allowing ment program, (In fact, available at press time, will be Windows XP
you to structure stories that work scene-to- the emphasis is more on and Mac OS-X native, and will include new
scene and throughout their overall arc. In the directors role.) this lectures by visiting professors and filmmak-
addition, the quickest secret to developing software bears mention- ers as well as new contents additions on the
complete, compelling human characters is ing for a couple of rea- subjects of scriptwriting, continuity, busi-
to build inherent conflict between them and sons. First, it leads the user from the writing ness plans, selling a short film, documentary
their fellow characters. stage through the complete filmmaking pro- production, experimental film and digital
In fact, the conflicts in Storybase each cessa useful tool for the writer-directors post-production.
involve one or more characters. You can out there. Second, its unique. 0RICE &OR MORE INFORMATION VISIT
explore each characters point of view and the This three CD-ROM set is a virtual film Howtomakeyourmovie.com
relationships between them. schoolright down to the rendered halls of
The character conflicts are then indexed academia and the various departments where
according to the mindset of the protagonist. the average film student might head during JOHN SCOTT LEWINSKIS next book, Alone in
Such mindset overviews lead you to conflicts the semester. a Room: The Secrets of Professional Screenwriters
that match your characters mental or emo- In each classroom, film professionals and (from Michael Wiese Productions: Mwp.com)
tional state during the story. professors from the various real-world film
Based on the mindset of your charac- schools teach workshops on the various stag- will hit shelves in late 2004. A featured screen-
ter, you can then make choices as to their es of filmmakingwriting, development, writer at the 2003 Cinestory Script Sessions with
movement, action or thrust. Thrust leads directing, editing, etc. If you follow the his award-winning script Slabtown, Lewinski
you to find conflicts that take your story course through to its fruition, you are guided
where you want it to gowhere you might literally through the completion of a short is represented by the management firm of
never have expected the story to go without student film. Benderspink in Hollywood, CA.
Screenwriting is all about economy and the forward momentum of the story. But at its
best, screenwriting is also about the poetry of the moving image. Robin Russin takes a look
at how to craft your description to make the reader see the film, not just read the script.
I
t may sound strange, but well-written they once were common in screenplays
description (aka the action, narrative and many seasoned writers still use them MEDIUM SHOT: From behind the
wavy glass of the old window,
or business) is a lot like poetryit out of habitthe trend is to avoid them, a small, shadowy figure comes
demands not only economy, but also precise and for good reasons. Camera directions to look out.
choices: the specificity of choosing exactly not only intrude on the directors turf, they
ANGLE ON MARIA: Shes a young
the right words and rhythms to conjure the also detract from the read: you want read- girl, with a frightened,
desired images and emotions. Its become ers to see the movie, not the movie set. Of trapped-looking face.
a truism that the screenplay is merely the course, you still want them to see the movie
ECU: In her light blue eyes,
blueprint for a movie; and not until recently the way you doand again, this is where we see reflected a lightning-
(if at all) has screenwriting been considered precise imagery comes into play. strike from the approaching
a literary form in its own right. But the fact So be specific. Find the right word. thunderstorm.
remains that a screenplayespecially a spec Theres nothing less involving than a script
script fighting to be noticed in the growing with description where piled-on adjec- Now, lets lose the camera directions and
locust-swarm of submissions assaulting the tives prop up generic nouns. Instead, an put in picture-making words:
industryshould not only map the story, but unadorned but descriptive noun, juicy
A MANSION looms, spectral,
do so in a way that uses the visual elements metaphor or simile would enliven the above a night-dark bog.
of each scene to convey the tone, texture and description rather than bog it down. Also,
mood of the potential film. It should do so remember that the language you use should In a high casement, a candle
flickers like a lost soul.
in a way that will compel habitually tired, contain not only your own unique voice
jaded and overwhelmed readers to become but also the personality of the kind of A SILHOUETTE ripples into view
so involved that they stop being aware of story youre writing. behind the ancient pane:
reading a script and start playing the film in Heres a bit of description using camera MARIA, a waif of 10, gapes out,
their heads as they turn the pages. Your script angles and generic language: petrified.
should be transparentyou want readers
WIDE MASTER: Its dark. In the The sky-blue pools of her eyes
to experience it as a movie. middle of nowhere, a huge, suddenly spark with the light-
decrepit-looking house rises ning of the gathering tempest.
CALLING THE SHOTS BY threateningly from a dead, wet,
marshy swamp.
LEADING THE EYE Not deathless, but clearly more economi-
Including camera directions and angles MOVING IN: A weak, wavering cal, image-oriented and evocative of the
tends to be discouraged nowadays. Although light is on in one window on an kind of gothic effect the scene is going for.
upper floor.
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still running hard.
The camera angles are clear without having a single shot. Its no wonder this script led
been spelled out. to a classic film. Not to get too lofty, but Again, notice how the shots are obvious
just compare it with a battle passage from from the way the scene is framed for us,
MOVING IMAGES Homers The Iliad (book XIII): going from a wide angle down into the alley,
As director Sergei Eisenstein pointed out to another wide shot up on the far roof, to
at the dawn of filmmaking, the right images Meriones leveled a bronze-tipped a close-up on Trinitys face and so on. The
cut into the right order create a powerful shaft at him as he was fleeing the field, description also directs the pacing of the
associative effect. He was dealing more with and struck him in the right hip. shots, the energy of the chase, the moment
the editing side of things; but you as the The arrow pierced the bone through of suspended hang-time and the resump-
writer create the first sequence of images and through and punctured his bladder. tion of the chase.
and, in a sense, are both directing and edit- So he sank where he stood and Billy Wilder and I.A.L. Diamonds
ing as you make those choices. gasped his last in his comrades embrace, description in The Apartment is going after
Lets look at the unforgettable chest- sprawled like a worm upon the earth a different kind of disjointed situation, the
bursting scene from Alien (in a draft cred- and watering the soil with the blood loneliness of the company man. Ive cut the
ited to Dan OBannon, David Giler and that spilled from his wound. dialogue to focus on the description:
Walter Hill):
The strategy in these passages is to evoke THE INSURANCE BUILDING - A WET,
A red stain. FALL DAY
shock and horror by looking unblinkingly at
Then a smear of blood blossoms the unfolding carnage. Its a big mother, covering a
on his chest. square block in lower Manhattan,
all glass and aluminum, jutting
PARADOXICAL PICTURES into the leaden sky.
The fabric of his shirt is
ripped apart. In another science-fiction landmark, The
Matrix, the strategy is to convey an eerie INT. NINETEENTH FLOOR
A small head the size of a distortion of perceived reality:
mans fist pushes out. Acres of gray, steel desks,
gray steel filing cabinets and
The crew shouts in panic. Leap FADE IN ON: steel-gray faces under indi-
back from the table. rect light. One wall is lined
COMPUTER SCREEN with glass-enclosed cubicles
The cat spits, bolts away. for the supervisory personnel.
So close it has no boundaries. It is all very neat, antisep-
The tiny head lunges forward. tic, impersonal. The only human
Comes spurting out of Kanes A blinking cursor pulses in touch is supplied by a bank
chest trailing a thick body. the electric darkness like a of IBM machines, clacking away
Splatters fluids and blood in heart coursing with phospho- cheerfully in the background.
its wake. rous light, burning beneath the
derma of black-neon glass.
Lands in the middle of the Instead of conveying a sense of menace
dishes and food. Here, the simile equating a computer cur- hidden under the surface of our reality, the
sor to a beating heart and the metaphor of paradoxes in this description are designed to
Wriggles away while the crew
scatters. a monitor screen as living tissue effectively present a bleakly comedic world where an
introduce the theme of blurred boundaries insurance building becomes a big mother
Then the Alien being disap- between actual and virtual life. Later on, (pun intended) like some kind of perverse
pears from sight.
what we see shows us were in a relativistic queen of a termite mound within which
Kane lies slumped in his worldbodies move in impossible ways, gray, drone-like workers scurry about like
chair. stand still while the world moves dizzyingly little robots. The only things that seem alive
Very dead. around them, and what we see may or may are the machines. As with Charlie Chaplins
not be real: Modern Times, here we havent been enslaved
A huge hole in his chest. by the mechanistic system so much as weve
The edge falls away into a wide simply surrendered to it in all its absurdity.
The dishes are scattered. back alley. The next build-
ing is over 40 feet away, but
Food covered with blood. Trinitys face is perfectly IMPLICATION, COMPARISON
calm, staring at some point AND TONE
beyond the other roof.
This is hard, fast-paced action writing What we see, by the way, can be sug-
but it also reads almost like a passage from The cops slow, realizing they gested by implication as well as by lit-
some grim epic poem. The staccato sen- are about to see something eral imagerythat is, by giving the reader
ugly as Trinity drives at the
tences, focused by terse, specific nouns edge, launching herself into a description that relies on shared experi-
(about 30 nouns to only about six adjec- the air. ence. Lawrence Kasdan is famous for his
tives), convey the tension and horror of the introduction of Mickey Rourkes character
From above, the ground seems to
scene with almost the same visual impact as flow beneath her as she hangs in Body Heat as a rock n roll arsonist.
watching the scene played out. The script in flight. We know what he looks like, because we all
clearly directs the scene, without calling have visual associations with rock n roll to
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his issues Great Idea and somehow occupy their time
focuses on the creation, for three-and-a-half hours with
selling and making of no lesson plan. I dont know what
the independent feature The to do, and I have no real under-
United States of Leland, released standing of where these kids are
by Paramount Classics and writ- coming from or what their level
ten and directed by Matthew of education is. Then I got there
Ryan Hoge. and looked around, and the faces
Hoge was born and raised werent what I thought theyd be.
in Colorado and attended the The longer I was around these
University of Southern California. kids, the more my perceptions of
He graduated magna cum laude from the requirements were, basically, that you dont who and what they were shifted. I wasnt
School of Cinema, receiving a BFA from the have tuberculosis and you do have a college there to witness the crime they committed.
Filmic Writing Program. In his senior year at degree. I had no idea what to expect, and I had no connection to the kid who cut his
USC, Hoges script Happy won the Abraham no teaching experience at all. But, I thought girlfriend in half or the kid who stabbed
Polonsky Award for Most Outstanding it would be very interesting, and I would his mother 40 times. I was interacting with
Screenplay. Hoge then went on to write meet people I certainly wouldnt have met that kid in a different way, on a different
and direct his first feature, Self Storage, for in my usual environment. I remember the basis. Those kids talked about how they
Zero Pictures over nine days on a budget of first day at a juvenile hall in East L.A. a missed their families and they were looking
$9,000. His next project, The United States site where I ended up working for about at 100 years, 180 years. I remember a kid
of Leland, premiered at Sundance in 2003 half of the two-year period I spent teaching. who came back from court and said, Mr.
and was picked up by Paramount Classics. I remember getting there, it was late and I Hoge, I just got 120 years. What does that
Currently, Hoge is on assignment writing was anxious. I was heading to the first class- mean to a 16-year-old? You start to get these
a feature for director Curtis Hanson while room, led there by someone official, and connections with them, and you realize that
completing his own original script which he I was asking, What do I teach? Where are theyre not at all what you expected.
wants to direct next. the lesson plans? He said, Heres what you A lot of the kids were there because of the
need to know: Count the pencils when you tremendous fear of gangs and societys desire
scr(i)pt: Can you tell us about how you hand them out and count the pencils when to sweep them under the rug. Even the kids
came up with the idea for The United States you get them back. Dont turn your back, who had done the absolute worst things,
of Leland? and teach them whatever you can. Youve had a lot of goodness in them. How can you
MATTHEW HOGE: The idea came from got the class for three-and-a-half hours. really define a life based upon one action?
an experience I had teaching. I had been In the classes, kids were grouped together Spending time with the class proved to me
living in Los Angeles, was out of school based on their offenses, and my first class that we had a lot more in common than I
and tired of working bad jobs, so I decided was a group of KL kids. (KL indicates had thought. It got me thinking about moral-
to get my teaching credential. I stumbled a homicide charge.) There were 17 kids ity. How do we define whats good and bad?
into a job teaching in juvenile hall, where charged with murder, and I had a feeling of I think we tend to walk a very rigid line and
it was ridiculously easy to get hired. The dread as I walked down the hall. I thought, say, Were over here and those people are
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storyboard book but you didnt have an agent. MH: Yes, he and his partner Bernie Morris. MH: The wild world of the independent
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financiers. It was nice to feel, when those that approach. We were trying to find the The film wasnt going to be
questions came up, I had support. For goodness in these people. The film wasnt
example, the handling of the film was very going to be about wallowing in how life is
about wallowing in how life is
understated and very subtle. I didnt want to awful. You just need to open your front door awful. You just need to open
do anything that would differentiate flash- to see how life is awful. your front door to see
backs from the reality of the chronological Finally, Thousand Words came onboard
march of the film. I felt like there were and put up a portion of the financing, and how life is awful.
enough visual cues, and I wanted to make from there we got the bulk of the financing
the audience work a little bit. My decision through MDP Worldwide, which is a for- hard because you have to accept that things
was questioned an awful lot: I assume eign sales company run by Mark Damon. will change during the process. I remember
youre shooting some other film stock, or Mark really responded to the script on an the first time that Ryan came in to read for
that youre going to shoot black and white emotional level. He asked all the questions; the part of Leland. I had been very resistant
for the flashbacks. It was nice to be able I gave him all the answers and that was it. to his even coming in because I had seen
to say, No, I want to do it this way, and As soon as Mark signed on, we had the full The Believer, which is great, but he was just
heres why and to know that I had someone budget; and we pushed forward as quickly totally different. He read [for the role] and
standing behind me who was behind all as we could. was good, but it wasnt what I had heard in
those decisions I was making. Spacey held my head. Then he came back again because
up to that promise of taking a leap of faith scr(i)pt: Did much change from the initial I thought he was good and read once more.
and not looking back. script? Again, he was great, but it still wasnt what I
MH: Right before we started to send the had heard. By the third time he came back, I
scr(i)pt: Would you go to these meetings script out, I did a little work on it. After was reading the script and I heard his voice.
with the financiers? With Kevin? Bernie? that, there was no rewriting at all. There Casting sort of evolves in that way. The part
MH: It varied. We spent about a year put- was no rewriting with Kevins company wouldnt have become like a real person had
ting together our cast before going out to or Thousand Words. When we started Ryan not infused it with what he brought to
companies. Our thinking was: The more shooting, there were little things we had the role. The same with the setting of juve-
solid the package, the easier it was going to to change for productionlike we couldnt nile hall. I wanted it to look a lot like the
be once we got to the point of taking it to get a locationthen small changes when I place where I taught. So I took everybody
financiers. rehearsed with the actors. Rehearsing was so there, the D.P., the costume designer, Ryan.
helpful because I would realize that a line We were trying to recreate the reality we saw
scr(i)pt: Had you been paid anything by was not going to work (and discovered that there. The set was not quite the way the real
this point? in the safety of rehearsal space as opposed to thing is, so we started to make changes, and
MH: No. For a while I was working as a being in front of the camera while time is they seemed to fit the film. Achieving the
teacher and then writing jobs were paying ticking). Again, I wanted to be visually pre- desired effect is an organic process; and you
the bills. pared, and I wanted to have it be the same begin to feel like, Yes, this is exactly what I
for the actors, to be at a point where we all intended, when the truth is it had evolved
scr(i)pt: Who finally put up the money? felt that the scene was working. from something else. In the cutting process
MH: The first party was Thousand Words there were definitely changes from the script
Jonah Smith and Palmer West. Young guys scr(i)pt: So, you finished the film and then to the film, but now it feels like thats what I
who were developing a track record for co- what happened? intended all along.
financing really risky films (Requiem for a MH: We made the decision that we didnt I was really lucky to be in a situation
Dream and Waking Life). They had two want to go into distributors. We now had a where it wasnt the case of someone telling
films under their beltbold films. We sat film with a bankable cast; we felt the more me to go this way and I was fighting to go
down with them after they had read the we controlled it, the better. We were in a another way. Kevin really trusted me and
script. They were interested in the actors we situation where we had two financiers who wanted me to be the guy who was running
had pieced together for it. Again, there were really connected with the project and were the show. There was no one second-guessing
a lot of questions. The meeting consisted of going to let me make the film I wanted to me; that allowed the film to move organical-
two hours worth of questions like, Where make without a bunch of interference. We ly. People brought things to it and changed
is this character coming from? They wanted decided to hold off and not let anyone see the course of it, but it was less of a fight and
to make sure I knew what I was doing it until Sundance. We kept it under wraps, more of a river flowing.
and that we were all on the same page and and the response was really good. A day
wanted to make the same film. I was amazed later it sold to Paramount Classics. KATE MCCALLUM is a Los Angeles-based pro-
ducer-writer-consultant under her newly created
at how differently people could see the film.
company BRIDGE ARTS MEDIA. She is gradu-
Often, people saw it as bleak and dark, and scr(i)pt: Some say that to direct your work
ating with an M.A. in Consciousness Studies
I was always speaking of it in terms of hope. as a writer is the surest way to protect your from the University of Philosophical Research
I always wanted to do something that was vision. Do you believe your vision as the writer in April and is currently working in develop-
figuratively and literally light in the treat- ultimately ended up on the screen the way you ment with writer-producer Michael Chernuchin
ment. When we sat down with Jonah and had hoped? at Universal Studios. Kate can be reached at
Palmer, they sparked to those ideas and to MH: Yes, I do. [Being a writer-director is] Lifeonthedrawingboard.com
ETERNAL SUNSHINE OF
THE SPOTLESS MIND
ry to name Hollywoods notable science-fic- as science fiction, he seems to tense up as if hes been
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Theres no dark conspiracy erasing memories; the characters have
freely chosen to have their memories of their bad love affairs erased.
The fate of Earth (or another planet) doesnt hang in the balance.
The movies concerns are at a more human scale: What makes a
love affair good or bad? Would we be better off without our pain-
ful memories, or do we need them to learn? And, in the end, what
makes us fall in love, anyway?
Like the very best science-fiction and fantasy writing, Eternal
Sunshine uses its fantasy elements to conjure a situation that illuminates
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Clementine after theyve had their memories and coming at the end of the movie as she did, Kaufman, a onetime actor and playwright,
erased, there are many moments in their early at that point it was, like, too little too late. had originally conceived the memory-eras-
scenes that only take on full meaning after I really like the story element of having ing scenes so that Clementine, who is being
we see what came before. her there so we understand a little bit about erased, would begin to behave like an automa-
For Kaufman, though, its important that where Joel came from, who he was with and ton or a husk of reality. Its an unusually
the memory erasurehe calls it a gim- how she contrasted with Clementine. Also, the theatrical device in that it puts the burden
micknot overshadow the relationship fact that he had to make a decision that was on the actor to create a special effect strictly
aspect of the story. Theres no doubt that Joel monumental, which is not clear now because with performance.
and Clementine arent a perfect couple and theres an allusion to her but you dont see her. In the film, though, the scenes are played
theyve had a stormy relationshipbut is The idea was that he actually left his long-term straight, and the degradation of memories is
that a bad relationship? Theyve had a painful relationship, which was a very risky thing for established visually as the settings disintegrate
breakup. Are they really better off without that him to do. around them with elements from one set often
pain? Those are left as open questions.
Its a very different picture of love from
what we usually see in movies. Films tend to
like romance: pretty couples meeting cute
and overcoming a few hurdles (big ones in
dramas, smaller ones in comedies) to get
together, usually to live happily ever after. In
real life, though, love and happiness dont
always go hand in hand; the fact that two
people are in love doesnt mean they wont
grate on each other, or even make each
other downright miserable. To some degree,
Eternal Sunshine is a rebuttal of Hollywood
love stories, even its sci-fi predecessors that
covered some of the same ground.
You dont see movies that show a lot of the
stress of the relationship, says Kaufman. I
am always sort of trying to fight that kind of
thing in my work because I feel that theres a
fantasy world thats presented to people when
they go to the movies. Speaking for myself, Ive
been very frustrated trying to find in my life
what I see in movies, in terms of relationships
or anything. Life is not like that, and so I sort
of set out in my screenplays to try and write
something that seems real to me, or true. I
guess this is whats true to me.
Kaufman did not have to take studio notes
during the early stages of writing. Propaganda
Films, which had bought the pitch, was bought
by USA, which in turn became part of Focus,
so the property changed hands several times.
Only at the end did he have to deal with
studio input.
There were changes along the way, though,
inevitably. When we spoke to him, Kaufman
and Gondry were still working out whether
to use a voiceover narration by Joel, and, if so,
how much. Kaufman wrote scenes showing
Joel with his previous girlfriend, Naomi, who
Joel left to be with Clementine. Her scenes
were filmed but didnt make it into the film.
I was against cutting her out, and I fought
for her and she was cut out completely. Then
part of it was brought back, and then the deci-
sion was made that there wasnt enough of her;
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THE ALAMO
I began work on The Alamo about six
years ago. (The movie as youll see it is
my own work and that of two other writ-
ersStephen Gaghan and the films direc-
tor, John Lee Hancock, both of whom did
wonderful work. What Im talking about
here is my own contribution to the movie
and how I did my work.) I knew that I
would essentially be writing a character
study for two acts, and a third act that was
virtually all battle. I had faced a similar
situation on a movie I wrote called Dantes
Peak. My first draft was convoluted, plotted
and full of obsessive characters. There were
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two problems: Nothing happened until the
star in The Alamo, written by Les Bohem and Stephen Gaghan and John Lee Hancock ABOVE: Jordi
volcano erupted; and, once it did erupt, it Molla and Dennis Quaid BELOW: Dennis Quaid All Photos Touchstone Pictures, All Rights Reserved.
annihilated everything in its path, including
all my unresolved plot threads.
This time, I had a few things going for was supposed to be able to do. belly. Madame Candaleria. This
woman is a curandero, a healer.
me. The movie is called The Alamo. People Here, in the raid on the jacales, he sees A candle burns at the foot of
know there is a battle coming. (Of course, the horrors of a real battle up close. He sees the bed.
people didnt go to see Dantes Peak because what the consequences of being Davy might There are small packets of
they thought the volcano wouldnt erupt.) I just be. He wavers for a moment, and Travis herbs on the floor. There
started my script at the end of the battle. You sees him waver. At the same time that I was are brightly colored wooden
dolls and other spirit toys.
see Davy Crockett, Jim Bowie and William showing his uncertainty, I wanted to show Gertrudis and Juana watch in
Travis among the dead. I imagined that these that he actually did have a heroic core. I respectful silence.
would be the familiar faces of movie stars. tried to do this in the way he leads the men Crockett comes in. Bowie looks
This seemed like an opening that would back into the walls of the Alamo after the up from his sick bed. Crockett
remind the audience that there was a battle jacales are torched, and again in the scene acknowledges the egg cure with
coming and keep them watching. with the little boy that follows it. At the
Then I had the characters. These guys same time, I wanted to use the raid to show CROCKETT
You must be in a bad way
were way better than anything I could have two things about Travis: that he was begin- ...
come up with. They were real, and they ning to be more of a leader than either he
were big. The changes in the characters or the men had suspected, and that he was
(I have taken an oath never to use the becoming more of a decent human being as
word arc in talking about a character.) of well. Travis has idolized Crockett, and this
Travis and Crockett, in particular, are made is the first time he sees anything like feet of
manifest in the siege and the battle. In other clay. It was important to see him deal both
words, the action is so much a part of build- with that realization and with Crockett. The
ing their characters that character dictates other men had to gain some respect here for
what action you show. Travis. They will, soon enough, be asked by
About halfway through the siege, for him to lay down their lives. Again, a tru-
example, Crockett and some of the others ismcharacter defined by action. They had
leave the Alamo walls for a raid on some to see something, as did we, that changed
small jacales behind which some of Santa our opinion of the man.
Annas soldiers are positioned. To my mind, Heres the scene. It begins with Crockett
PHOTO: Lance Staedler
Crockett was a man forced by circumstances talking to Jim Bowie, a man who was never
into becoming this legend that he traded afraid of a fight, who was perhaps a lot more
on and resented, both because he suspected like Davy than Crockett ever was.
that people liked Davy a lot better than they
would like him and because he was afraid INT. BOWIES ROOM - DAY
An ancient hand rolls an egg
that he could never do the things that Davy across James Bowies naked
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The fire stops the soldiers, UP ON THE WALL they join the crowd around Travis
their horses rearing. The defenders watch, cheering and the others. Travis turns to
their men home. Crockett and the others.
Crockett and the others begin a
dodging run back for the front OUT PAST THE GATES
gate of the Alamo. Shots kick Garrett has fallen, twisting TRAVIS
up the mud at their feet. Ahead his ankle. Well done, men.
of them, behind them. Crockett
can feel Travis looking at him. TRAVIS One of volunteers who went on the
He shouts to the men, trying sees that Garrett has fallen. raid slaps Travis on the back.
to step up, to atone for his He turns and runs back through
moment of weakness. enemy fire.
VOLUNTEER
He reaches Garrett, slings the It was all right, werent
CROCKETT (contd) mans arm over his shoulder, it, Colonel?
Weave around! Straight and carries him through the
linell kill you! Alamo gates.
GARRETT
They dodge more shots as they IN THE PLAZA OF THE ALAMO You got any more chores
race across the barren. Crockett and the others come need doing, you just give
racing in. Travis and Garrett us the order ... sir.
ON THE EMPLACEMENT IN THE are the last through the
SOUTHWEST CORNER gates, Travis all but carrying Travis enjoys the first real
Dickerson and his cannon crew Garrett. Crockett looks up to success of his command. The
watch Crockett and the oth- see Bowie, propped up by Juana men gather around him, reliving
ers. Susanna is there as well. and Gertrudis. Hes come out to the just-completed adventure.
Dickerson calls over to the see how they did. Crockett has Garrett looks up at Crockett.
sentries at the main gate. a hard time meeting his eye.
OUT PAST THE GATES GARRETT (contd)
SENTRY The Mexican soldiers who have How about the Colonel,
Here they come! been riding towards them rein Davy. He done all right
in, a few firing last futile by us, wouldnt you say?
OUT PAST THE GATES shots. Shouting insults and
Travis, Crockett and the others threats. Behind them, the jaca- Crockett nods, then turns and
are close to the gates. Mexican les blaze. starts away. Travis watches him
Cavalry soldiers ride towards go. A beat and then he starts
them, firing. IN THE PLAZA OF THE ALAMO after him.
Susanna comes down from the TRAVIS
The gates open. The Mexican emplacement with her husband and Crockett.
soldiers continue to fire.
TRAVIS (contd)
What happened out there at
the huts ... could have hap-
pened to anyone.
Crockett nods. After a beat he says
CROCKETT
Im not supposed to be any-
one, am I?
EXT. THE PLAZA OF THE ALAMO -
NIGHT
Keeping to the shelter of the wall,
Susanna moves across the Plaza.
The bombardment continues. Blasts
at the walls and musket volleys
intended to jangle nerves.
She sees Crockett, sitting in the
dark with his back against the
wall, staring out into the Plaza.
SUSANNA
Mr. Crockett.
Crockett looks up.
SUSANNA (contd)
Are you all right?
A beat. Crockett nods. Susanna
hesitates another moment and then
continues on her way.
ON THE WEST WALL
Travis stands, looking out at the
Mexican campfires that arc in a
huge, closing circle around the
Alamo. From across the river in
town come the sounds of another
raucous evening.
SUSANNA
(O.S.)
Its a beautiful country,
isnt it? Goes on forever.
Travis turns, smiling as he sees
her.
TRAVIS
You came out here with your
husband?
SUSANNA
Dragged him kicking and
screaming all the way from
Tennessee.
(a beat)
Almeron thinks Im crazy.
TRAVIS
Why crazy?
SUSANNA
For wanting to start over. To
be someone youre not until
you do it so well that you
are that new person. Do you
know what I mean?
TRAVIS
(a beat)
I believe that I know exact-
ly what you mean.
He looks right at her and she
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doesnt look away. Enrique shakes his head. No.
Crockett takes a beat. Something with Hot Wheels. Brrmmm CRASH
DOWN BELOW shifts in his eyes. We catch a ... BOOM! and you get to be a storyteller
Crockett sits lost in his rare glimpse deeper inside.
thoughts. Now he hears something. in the same breath. This beats working for
A childs WHIMPERING, coming a living by a long shot.
from the chapel. He gets up. The CROCKETT (contd)
Then I guess if I was What I learned from writing action was
bombardment starts again and he
has to run for the chapel. to tell you I felt more that I had been totally wrong about writing
like the bear right now action. You do get to be Agnes DeMille
IN THE CHAPEL than like the hunter, it
He finds Enrique Esparza, hud- wouldnt make you any and her uncle Cecil, too.
dled, frightened, under the stat- more scared than you
ue of St. Francis. Crockett walks already are.
over and sits down next to him. After a burgeoning career
Doesnt say a thing. The bombard- He keeps his smile on when he in rock n roll stopped bur-
ment intensifies around them. says this and Enrique smiles geoning, LES BOHEM got
Finally, the boy looks up. back. Crockett settles against to work writing screenplays
CROCKETT the wall and crosses his arms about rock n roll musicians
Noisy, aint it? around his knees. Enrique watch- whose careers had also
es him for a moment, then folds stopped burgeoning. But no one makes movies
He smiles at Enrique. Poor lit-
tle kid is so scared it breaks his arms in the exact same man-
about rock n roll musicians who, etc., and so
your heart. ner. The man and the boy sit
he wrote A Nightmare on Elm Street Part 5, The
back to wait out the night.
Horror Show and bits and pieces of several other
CROCKETT (contd) memorable epics. Eventually Twenty Bucks, a
How old are you?
As I said already, I love writing the all script of his fathers that he rewrote, was made.
Enrique holds up eight fingers. hell breaks loose part. For a screenwriter Following that there was Daylight, a script of
Crockett nods. his that a lot of other people rewrote, and then
who isnt directing, it is, in fact, some of
the most cinematic writing youll ever Dantes Peak. Last year, he wrote the Golden
CROCKETT (contd) Globe-nominated, Emmy Award-winning 20
My oldest boy, John do. You are telling your story visually,
hour mini-series Taken which he executive pro-
Wesley, I first took him which is what youre always supposed to
hunting for bear when he duced with Steven Spielberg and for which he
be doing; but sometimes in the middle has also been nominated for a Writers Guild
was eight. East Tennessee,
the bear were good then. of those dinner-table scenes, you tend to Award. The Alamo, on which he shares written-
You dont know what Im forget. You get to give your imagination by credit with Stephen Gaghan and John Lee
talking about, do you?
full rein. You get to be a little kid playing Hancock, opens in April.
I
n the fall of 1999, my wife was pregnant has secretly developed a proce-
with our first child, and, for the first dure by which a single cell from
time in my life, I found myself visiting their sons body could be used
an Ob/Gyns office. With every appoint- to create a genetically identical
ment, I was struck by just how much tech- fetus: a clone. The procedure
nology was involved in prenatal care; the would mean implanting this
dopplers, the sonograms, the seemingly end- fetus in the mother, who would
less blood testsId never thought about then carry it to term, and, in
how integral a role science plays in modern effect, give birth to her child
procreation. Although I felt a sense of assur- again. If the couple chooses
ance, even empowerment, in technologys to participate, it will require
ability to pare down biologys uncertain- moving to an isolated commu-
ties, there was also something creepy (in nity where the doctors clinic is
Robert DeNiro stars in Godsend, written by Mark Bomback
a Cronenberg sort of way) about all the located and severing all ties with
imposing machines and sleek gadgetry. I anyone who ever knew their son. Two things in particular really grabbed
dont remember precisely where I was when After much hand-wringing, the couple me about this idea. The first was the notion
the idea itself hit me, but I do recall the agrees to go through with it. The procedure of examining a topical issue through the lens
idea arriving not in the form of a character, is a success. The mother gives birth to their of a thriller. I had read a few articles about
concept or plot device, but really as one big son again, and everything seems perfectly cloning technology and was consistently
chunk of story. fineuntil eight years later when the boy amazed by the possibility (some would
The story was this: A married couple, finally outlives the age at which hed previ- say inevitability) that the same techniques
Paul and Jessie Duncan (played in the film ously died. Suddenly, the child begins to which gave birth to Dolly the sheep might
by Greg Kinnear and Rebecca Romijn- have terrifying nightmares, nightmares that someday be applied to human reproduction.
Stamos), tragically lose their eight-year-old begin to bleed into his waking life and start While the debates over stem-cell research
son and are, of course, utterly devastated. to affect the boys behavior, nightmares that and the mapping of the human genome
They are approached by a long-forgotten are taking their toll on everyone around werent to become headline-worthy subjects
acquaintancea brilliant doctor named himespecially his parents who come to until another year or two, I had a hunch
Richard Wells (played in the film by Robert suspect that maybe playing God wasnt that the question When has science gone
DeNiro)who confides in them that he necessarily the best decision after all. too far? would only become more pressing
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in the 21st century. Of course, many main- production companies. Our childs due date
stream movies have tackled cloning before, was only a few weeks away, and I was finding
but they were usually broad comedies or it difficult to concentrate on anything other
futuristic sci-fi fantasies. To my knowledge, than my own nerves. I figured pitching the
none dealt with cloning as a genuine pos- story would be a good use of time. I could
sibility in the real world. get some diverse and objective feedback, and
The second thing that really intrigued me if, by some chance, someone wanted to actu-
was the theme of wish fulfillment vis--vis sci- ally pay me to write it, well, far be it for me
ence. In doing research into the debate over to say no. Sounds like a good plan, right?
human cloning, I was surprised to discover Not exactly. Pitching the idea requires
that a predominant argument for cloning was fleshing out the story into three acts that
that it could be used to resurrect a lost loved take anywhere from 10 to 15 minutes to
one. While I hesitate to weigh in on the relate. This development can prove prob-
debate itself, this particular rationale strikes lematic because you can wind up rushing
me as being, if not ultimately persuasive, your thought process as opposed to letting
undeniably poignant. I can only imagine how it evolve over the several weeks or months
excruciating the death of ones child must be, it takes to write a first draft. Next thing you
and if presented with the opportunity offered know, your storys going down the wrong
to the couple in Godsend, how difficult it road simply because of a few hasty turns of
might be for any parent to decline. This the wheel. In the case of Godsend, I really Screenwriter Mark Bomback
snippet is from the scene that immediately hadnt thought the tone through. What
follows that offer. Paul and Jessie return to started out like a family drama morphed into
their empty apartment: a hodgepodge that resembled The Shining kind of movie the original idea wanted to
meets Village of the Damned with a touch be. (See? Obtuse and pretentious.)
PAUL of Alien tossed in for a kicker. (Dont ask.) While writing Godsend, there were many
Honey, I love you beyond words.
But only one tiny thing has to Suffice it to say, the feedback I received was opportunities to botch the toneand I
go wrong -- and theres so much less than effusive; and I can assure you that, assure you, I managed to seize quite a
that needs to go right.
other than the core elements from the storys few of them over the course of numerous
JESSIE first act, practically nothing from my origi- drafts. Sometimes a scene would read so
But if it did --
nal pitch version survived. Ultimately, all subtle as to feel either pointless or expo-
PAUL that proved useful about taking the story out sitional; other scenes came off as over-
It still wouldnt be Adam
again. It would be a new child, for a premature test drive was that I uninten- blown and trope-ridden. The films that,
more like an identical twin -- tionally exorcised my cheesiest impulses. to my mind, most successfully achieved
JESSIE A few weeks after my son was born, I the tone I was struggling for were thrillers
Hed have the same face. The began the process of writing the screenplay like Rosemarys Baby, The Exorcist and (per-
same laugh. This is our only
chance ... on spec. Chastened by my pitch sessions, haps less obviously) Straw Dogs. Looking
I decided to approach the script in a way at these films, you realize they all shared
She breaks down crying. Paul that, for me at least, was a novelty. Rather a common burden: Their audiences knew
approaches, hugs her tightly.
than outline the beats of the entire story, something very bad was going to happen.
PAUL I simply started writing, leaving myself They didnt know when it was coming or
I promise you, somehow we will a solid hour or two each day for copious how, but theyd seen the trailer. They knew
have another --
note-taking. By the time I was halfway the set-up. That sort of knowledge could
JESSIE through the script, Id plotted in broad very easily distract an audience, or worse,
I dont want another child!
I want him! I want Adam -- I strokes the remainder of the film; but what breed impatience. The moviegoers were
want him back! I managed to accomplish over the course of not only expecting to be scared, but they
the writing was a consistency of tone. also wanted that scare to be gratifying.
In the book Danse MacabreStephen Ill confess, I really dont like to discuss What these films did so successfully was
Kings excellent survey of the horror genre tone. On those occasions that Im asked to delay that gratification, and, in doing so,
in literature and filmhe defines the terror about the tone of something on which Im they transformed their burden into a tre-
generated by the best horror as arising from working, I will inevitably duck the query mendous asset. The filmmakers knew that if
a pervasive sense of disestablishment; that by simply comparing the screenplay in they could just get their audience to believe
things are in the unmaking. This terror, in question to movies the petitioner is likely in the characters reality and empathize with
a nutshell, was the effect I was striving for in to have seen. I do this because Ive found their situation, then the other shoe was the
Godsend: A persistent and incremental feeling that when I am pressed to elaborate, my filmmakers to drop whenever and wherever
that something bad is just around the corner. response degenerates into a monologue they wished. The nail-biting, edge-of-your-
It took me a while to get there, however. that is, at best, obtuse and, more often, seat fun was in the hovering. Of course,
Prior to writing the screenplay on spec, pretentious. In my experience, Ive hit the these films all had wonderful characters
I decided to pitch the idea to a handful of right tone when the movie feels like the and highly dramatic situations, but I would
House
of
Sand
AND
FOG
by Shawn Lawrence Otto
T
he thing about novels is this: The Such problems happened in the story we
better they are, the more internal are about to discuss. Capturing that inter-
they are. Novels tell the story from nal narrative was the first challenge I faced
the inside looking out. A great novel plumbs when Vadim Perelman, the director (who
the depths of human emotion, morality and also received screenplay credit), and I sat
spirituality, and then uses the insights gained down in my writing study in Minnesota to
to drive characters to life-changing actions. talk about how to approach this project.
The thing about movies is this: The better
they are, the more external they are. Movies THE SET-UP
tell the story from the outside looking in. A The story for House of Sand and Fog cen-
great movie captures the breadth and speci- ters around two people: Colonel Massoud
ficity of human action, and then uses the Amir Behrani, who fled Iran with his fam-
structure of that action to drive the audience ily when the Shah fell; and Kathy Nicolo,
to life-changing insights or emotions. a recovering addict who is all alone in the
So the trick of the deal is this: How do world. Behrani is almost broke and is work-
you take an internal art form and retell it in ing two menial jobs to make ends meet. He
a way that its complex spirituality, emotion purchases a home at a sheriffs auction for a
and morality can be captured externally by fraction of its value, and he thinks that his
a machinethe camera? ship has finally come in. He plans to fix the
Thats the joy and the challenge of adap- house up and sell it, enabling him to save
tations. Unlike writing an original, when his family from destitution and to send his
youre writing for the screen from the start, son Esmail to college. The only problem is
with an adaptation youre inventing a paral- that Behranis saving grace is Kathys house,
lel story that captures an internal narrative inherited from her father and the only thing
in external, dramatic terms. Inventing that standing between her and homelessness.
story poses some really cool problems that Worse, the house was mistakenly taken away
get to the heart of what both screenplays and from her due to a bureaucratic snafu. When
novels are all about. legal remedies fail her, Kathy sets out to get
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there might be hope for a mutual resolu- and the themes of the novel, and to have
tion. Shes devastated. These people are like Kathy learn.
her family now. In other words, we were true to the story
Ironically, the Behranis are the only peo- in dramatic form. Vadims instinct when we
ple who have ever shown Kathy the love first spoke on the phone about the project
and compassion for which shes longed, was right: We needed to create a smidgeon
and this moment is exalted. She tears of hope. We did that, and we got out, and
at the plastic bag sucked into Behranis we left Kathy and the audience with the
mouth. The intimacy, the grief as she tries responsibility for the final question of where
mouth to mouth. Weeping. She tries Nadi sheand we allwill go from here.
next. But shes too late.
Then we cut to the widows walk. Its a
high-wide shot. Lots of lights turningcop The son of an immigrant, SHAWN LAWRENCE
cars, ambulances surrounding the house. OTTO lives in a wind-powered, passive solar
Emergency scene. The bodies are loaded up, house he designed and built with his own
and Kathys smoking, just blowing smoke.
hands on a 30-acre horse farm in Minnesota.
This is her loss now, too. This cop comes
up the stairs; hes got to file his report, and He studied architecture but became a writer
he says, Maam? She looks, and shes just because all his heroes were writers. He
smoking. He says, Maam, is this your once edited a Shakespeare journal, and hes
Screenwriter Shawn Lawrence Otto house? Shes smoking, and we go close on
now a screenwriter, political strategist, cam-
her face and her eyes. She says, No, no its
not. She forswears it. paign manager for his wife, Minnesota Rep.
Kathy leaves. Maybe shes pissed, maybe Thats how the beginning and ending Rebecca Otto and a Cub Scout leader for his
shes just going for a walk down the hill, got changed in the adaptation of House son Jakes pack. He made close friends from
to the beach, whatever, while she is wait- of Sand and Fog. The beginning because
Iran and other countries while at Macalester
ing for Deputy Sheriff Lester. But then she we needed to be true to the novel. The
comes back. She finds them there. Dead ending because we needed to not be true College, where he graduated Phi Beta Kappa
on the bed, at the moment she thought to the novel, but true to the characters and magna cum laude.
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scr(i)pt: How did this show come about? To whom did you pitch? scr(i)pt: How long were the shorts?
BUTCH HARTMAN: I originally pitched the idea back in 1997 to BH: Seven minutes, but now each individual episode of The Fairly
Fred Seibert (creator of Nickelodeons Oh, Yeah! Cartoons). Fred was OddParents is 11 minutes long. You get two stories per half-hour.
buying short cartoons from everybody in town. He bought about 25 Fred originally wanted me to make each story seven minutes long.
or 28 cartoons from other creators, and I slid in right under the wire I disagreed. When I first got this project sold, I said that I had so
and filled the last slot of the first season. Oh, Yeah! Cartoons was a much to talk about that I wanted to make the shorts longer. Most
show that you turned on for a half-hour, and youd see three different [other] shows are 11 minutes long, but theyre actually five-minute
seven-minute cartoonsan anthology kind of thing. Eventually, the stories stretched out to fill the time. Our shows are 11 minutes long,
network started looking at those little bits of cartoons to see which but we have a half-hours worth of comedy pumped into them. At
ones worked the best. I was very fortunate. They ended up giving least, we try to shove that much in there.
me another six shorts to do. By the time I finished, I had 10 shorts STEVE MARMEL: I think with seven minutes, most of the time,
of The Fairly OddParents. Then they picked it up as a series for six you can only do a gag-based show. Its set up as joke, joke, joke, joke,
half-hour episodes. conclusion. We try to have an A-story and a running gag in every
I met Steve when he and I worked on Johnny Bravo at Hanna- one of these episodes; thats why they are so packed.
Barbera in 1996. Then when I sold The Fairly OddParents, he came
onboard as a writer and eventually became the story editor. We both scr(i)pt: When you were developing the show, how did you come up
wrote pretty much everything the first season, and we write the show with your characters and the setting?
like a sitcom. We approach everything from a story-based point of BH: When I was a kid, I always felt smarter than the adults around
view. Its always story, story, story first, then funny pictures later. me. I was like 10 or 11, and all these adults around me were these
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wacky people. I knew I was smarter than usually happens with Timmy by accident
they were. I could do what they could based on something that any 10-year-old
do, but I was only 10 and couldnt drive, kid would want.
couldnt vote and couldnt shop. I couldnt BH: I wanted a show that could go any-
do anything for myself because I was a kid. where so that Id never be stuck for a story
So I was powerless. idea. At any time in the story, if I want to
I thought it would be funny to give a poof to the moon or poof to Paris or
kid like that the power to do whatever he poof to Hawaii, I can do that. I think
wanted. Plus, I wanted the setting to be thats part of the appeal of the show.
suburbia. I also thought it would be neat if SM: We really focus on character-
he was an only child and his parents worked based comedy. When we first started
all the time. Then he would need to have doing this, the idea was to have
a babysitter, which is where the character interesting enough characters that
Vicky comes in. Because I grew up with the if they were just sitting around a
snow and hated it, he lives in an environ- library for 11 minutes, theyd still
ment where there is no snow. be funny. Once those characters
Timmy, my main character, is named were defined, you could put them
after my youngest brother. I have three in almost any situation and their
younger brothers: Mike, Keith and Tim. I voices would go in the direction of
was going to name him Mike, but we had the comedy of their character.
an argument that week, so now its Timmy. BH: The greatest example [of that kind
Overall, the environment basically is fun. of set-up] is The Honeymooners, one of
Plus, the style of the artthis doesnt apply the greatest shows of all time. Yet the set
to the writingis a style Id never done is one of the worst sets everjust this
before. I was an animation artist for years, box [of a] kitchen. But Ralph Kramden
and this was a new style I wanted to try. (Jackie Gleason) is there and Ed Norton
(Art Carney) is there and the wives (Audrey
scr(i)pt: How is it different? Meadows as Alice and Joyce Randolph as
BH: I used to draw in a very traditional Trixie) are there; and they can do anything
Hanna-Barbera type way. This cartoon is or say anything, and it is hilarious. It doesnt
more of Hanna-Barbera-ish style mixed with matter that they are in that kitchen because
the UPA (United Producers of America) the characters are so great. comic, and Scott did some stand-up.
style of the 1950s. It sort of has more of a BH: Scotts father was a stand-up comic.
retro look. scr(i)pt: I watched the show last night. It was Scotts a real funny guy, and hes a real
Writing-wise, I always wanted to make sure the one where the parents went off on a fancy, funny writer. Steve also does a lot of stand-
the show was funny all the timenon-stop non-business business trip, and Timmy wished up. Cynthia was initially hired as a script
so that it would grab the audience right out the babysitter a million billion miles away. coordinator, not as a writer. She [wrote] a
of the gate until I was ready to let them go. BH: Oh, yeah. [The father says,] Were biography called American Scream about
going on a business trip to Big Resort Bill Hicks, the comedian. She wanted to
scr(i)pt: What is your process for finding Springs Beach. Theyve got fishing. Not take a crack at a script, and we gave her the
and developing stories? business. Deep sea not-businessing and eight chance. She did a good job, so we let her
BH: Since the show is about a 10-year- different restaurants. do more. Its good to have Cynthia on the
old boy, we always start off with: What is SM: Thats a good example, too, of the kind staff because shes our female point of view,
Timmys problem today? What issue does of joke where we dont write at kids. We which is nice because Steve, Jack, Scott and
Timmy have to overcome? Is he hiding write what we think is funny, and kids find I do all the superhero-based stuff.
from the school bully? Does he have too that funny; and because we write what we
much homework? Does he not want to eat think is funny, adults are finding it funny, scr(i)pt: What are the shows demographics?
his vegetables? Things like that. How does a too. I also think that part of what makes the BH: We have a lot of crossover appeal,
boy with those problemswho just so hap- show such a success is that nobody puts a which is really exciting because it means we
pens to have magical fairy godparentsget muzzle on their comedy when theyre put- can write stuff that we think older people
around those problems? ting their stuff in the scripts. will get. Kids who are five now will get
At first, he makes a wish that seems it when theyre 15. When we first started
pretty great, but then it always has to go scr(i)pt: How many writers are on staff? out, the main focus was on ages six to
wrong in some way or right in some way. BH: Basically five. Theres myself, Steve, 11, but a lot of older kids have gravitated
Usually, its wrong. Jack Thomas, Scott Fellows and our newest to the showa lot of 14-year-olds, a lot
SM: We use that to get to the wish and addition, Cynthia True. of college-aged kids and a lot of adults
then escalate it from there. Its a show that SM: Every one of those writers has com- have, too. Weve received tons of reports
can go anywhere and do anything, and that edy experience. Jack used to be a stand-up of college kids loving the show. I have two
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and draws it out. Then, we put the boards
up on the wall in the conference room; and
normally the artist who draws it, pitches it
for us. Because its my show, I insist that the
whole staff come to the pitch. I like a big
When I learned my screenplay
audience so we can get instant reaction to
won rst place in scr(i)pt maga-
see if its funny or not.
zines Open Door Contest Pilar
Now, some people are talented artists,
was the FIRST person I called.
and some are talented pitchers. Very rarely
Why? Because without her
can one person do both well, but we have
help, her class and her ideas,
a few of those on our staff. When the artist
my writing would not be what
is great but doesnt pitch so well, someone
it is today. Work with On The
else will pitch.
Page if you want to learn how
To me, the pitch is like a show. You do the
to stop thinking like a per-
voices. You do the sound effects. Then it all
son who writes screenplays
comes down to the network [execs] in the
-- and start thinking more like
room. If they like the boards, they sign off on
a screenwriter.
it, or they may give a couple of notes.
Producer/Head Writer Steve Marmel
SM: Its a really great process. On other
- Scott Huebscher,
shows that Ive written, you couldnt punch
First Place Winner
things up. You didnt get the chance to see go into a show that has a modern stone-age
Open Door Screenwriting
whether things worked or didnt in the family in it. The kids will love it because it
Contest
grand scheme of things. Sometimes, theres will feature our main characters drawn in a
stuff on the page thats hilarious; but when lot of different cartoon styles. The adults will
you put it up on the wall, it just doesnt dig it, too, because it will remind them of
work. So [here] you get to pull it out before the stuff they grew up with. Lets hope they
its sent to Korea and animated. had happy childhoods.
BH: A lot of shows have the board artist do SM: Everybody is a fan of certain shows,
the writing as they go. Its really hard if the and this is a way for us to tell the story we
person is a good artist but not a good writer. wanted to tell and have the favorites run-
SM: I tend to think that unless that per- ning in the background. We can wink at all
son is a really talented writer [as well as a] this stuff we grew up with.
board artist, those stories that go from out- Anyway, the writers are involved with
line to a cartoon sometimes tend to be too every step of the process. Once we say,
linear. Youre not thinking ahead and plot- Okay, we do this premise in story form,
ting out the story. Youre telling something then well sit down and have a beat meet-
in a linear fashion. The Fairly OddParents ing. Butch will be there. Ill be there. The
is so layered, you have to sit down with writers will be there, and well just bang out
your building blocks and put it together the ideaflesh the premise out. Then, the
in a way that tells the best story and gives outline is written. That gets approved with
you the best opportunity for jokes. Thats network notes. Then, well sit down and
not always going to be: A goes to B goes to bang it out some more, and then send the
C goes to D. writer off to write the script.
BH: Sometimes a small idea takes off. We BH: There are very few animated shows Script Consultation &
pitched an idea where Timmy goes into the that have our thoroughness in the writing Screenwriting Classes
TV set and runs through a couple of differ- process. It would be nice if all of them
ent TV shows. We wanted to just make an did, but were fortunate that we have the
11-minute show; but the network liked it resources to do that.
so much, they wanted to expand it to a 90- Pilar Alessandra
minute TV movie. So, thats now become Instructor / Consultant
Author of The Screenwriting Life, RICH
our next TV movie. Were calling it Channel
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self into his television and travels through a technical writer on government projects. A
a lot of different types of animated TV graduate of the Naval Academy and a former
showsthe kind of Saturday morning shows Navy SEAL, Rich currently works at Paramount
that are reminiscent of things we all watched Pictures in network television business affairs as
as kids. Hell go into a Jetsons-like show. Hell he pursues a career in screenwriting.
I
accomplished this feat almost by acci- after his defeat at Waterloo when he was and rescuing fair maidens from the villains
dent when I chose Napoleon Bonaparte held prisoner by a cruel jailor on St. Helena. clutches, would probably work far better as
as the hero for my film project, Betsy Here, Napoleon found renewed strength in film material than a movie about Karl Marx
and the Emperor. I wrote a film treatment his innocently playful, mischievous friend- or Franz Kafka, interesting though those last
first, then a novel based upon itand got ship with an English teenager. Napoleon two may have been.
my then-unpublished book into the hands had soared to the heights of greatness and As you probably noticed, most of the
of stars. In short order, I had actors like eventually plunged to the depths of defeat famous examples I gave above have been
Dustin Hoffman, Anthony Hopkins and and despair, though he fought bravely to the done to death in the movies. So thats why
Al Pacino wanting to play the role in a film end to keep his dignity and self-respect in its important that you either do a brand-
version. Was this because I had written the the face of almost impossible odds. new twist on a familiar story, which is the
greatest role since Hamlet? No, though Id Who wouldnt want to play a role like best and wisest way to go, or make sure
like to think otherwise. that? Of course, it didnt hurt that a lot that there is nothing similar in development
The real reason movie stars were inter- of popular movie stars are shortlike before you start writing your script. (For
ested in the role in my book was that they Napoleon. At the time I wrote my book, example, theres currently a film in develop-
would be playing one of the best-known it had been a while since any movie about ment in which Sherlock Holmes supposed
great men of historya brilliant military Napoleon had been produced. So the timing descendanta womansolves cases.)
and political leader who crowned himself was right, and the story was (mostly) true. Sometimes it pays to choose as the sub-
emperor, a pithy and fascinating speaker, a The lesson in all this for you is that if ject of your screenplay a fascinating, little-
mercurial personality who rose from relative your timing is good, and you can come up known figure in history who had far more
poverty and obscurity to power and riches, a with an idea for a film about a great man or impact than most people realize. This will
great lover, the most famous man of his cen- woman of historypreferably, one who is also reduce the chances that other writers
tury who literally conquered the world. He widely knownwho hasnt been seen on a will have something similar in development.
was both tender and strong, high-minded movie screen in a while, you may be able to Keep in mind that the criteria you should
and ruthless. My story depicted him when attract a star to the role. By great I mean use for choosing your famous hero or hero-
he was facing the greatest struggle of his life: famous activist figures of history or legend ine must be exactly the same as they would
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be for any other type of screenplay: Find So, what about all those cameos or small answer that question, dont bother to ask a
a great story. If you could substitute Joe parts you see stars doing in movies? As we star to read your screenplay.
Schmo for your famous protagonist and say in New York, Fuhgedaboudit. When Sometimes, a star may be well-known for
the story would be just as dramatic and riv- a star takes a small role in a movie, he does doing one kind of role (such as comedy)
eting, thats when you know youve chosen this for only one of two reasons: as a favor but might love to get a part that offers him
the right subject for your screenplay. to a friend or colleague, or the person who something new that shows you shouldnt
But what if you dont want to write a asked him to do it is so revered by him as underestimate his acting ability. Robin
historical epic? How do you go about writ- a legend in the film business that the star Williams was smart when, early in his career,
ing the sort of role that will attract someone would be willing to do anything he asks. he played dramatic roles as well as comedic
like Tom Cruise or the hot, young female ones so that he would be thought of as a fine
star-of-the-moment (which seems to change CHEWING THE SCENERY actor for drama, which, of course, he was
every week)? Here are some tips Ive gath- When a star comes onboard a film proj- all along. But some comedians hit it big in
ered from my 20-plus years working as a ect, the screenplay is often rewritten to suit comedy and have trouble getting out of the
story analyst and writer. him. What generally suits him will be more rut once they get itchy to win an Oscar or
opportunities to chew the scenery: the kinds respect for their dramatic chops. Can you
THERE ARE NO SMALL of emotional scenes and high dramatics that write the role that will win Jack Black or
ROLES, ONLY SMALL ACTORS give actors a shot at winning an Oscar. Why Will Ferrell an Oscar for drama? Maybe in a
Bunk! If you want to attract a star to your wait until a star comes onboard to write a star few years theyll be ready to do that. Maybe
script, it had better be to play the lead role. role? If you dont write a great part, you may theyre ready nowor maybe theyll never be
Furthermore, the role better have lots of never get a star anyway. Read the final draft ready. What about writing a great acting role
lines, shouldnt disappear from the story for of your screenplay and ask yourself honestly: for a really popular singer? Keep in mind
long stretches of time and should start on If I were Russell Crowe (or whichever super- that inside every comedian or singer there
page oneor pretty close to it. If you per- star youre trying to get), with Hollywoods beats the heart of Laurence Olivieror at
suade stars to read your scriptwhich isnt best roles by its greatest screenwriters being least thats the way most of them see them-
as difficult as you may thinkyou dont offered to me every day of the weekand selves. Elvis wanted to be the next James
want them to be leafing through it at home, those roles are coming to me with truckloads Dean. Frank Sinatra was absolutely desperate
saying to themselves, Wheres my part? of cash on the tablewhy would I want to to get the role of Maggio in From Here to
Big stars want to play big roles. play the role in your screenplay? If you cant Eternity, which won him an Oscar.
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really larger-than-life character parts (One performance that showed he can do much write for them that determines the success
Flew Over the Cuckoos Nest, for example). more than stammer charmingly. of a movie, but also the story as a whole.
Older or less conventionally handsome/ In short, when writing a role for a star So, learn your craft.
beautiful stars usually end up playing char- especially an older starthink character Remember that even if your films pro-
acter roles. Some aging stars made a suc- role but write lead. tagonist is an anti-hero, he should have at
cessful transition from young, romantic least some admirable qualities and on some
leads to character parts. Jimmy Stewart THE WHOLE KIT AND level the audience must be rooting for him
did this when he went from being a callow KABOODLE to succeed.
youth in Mr. Smith Goes to Washington to, A good role for a star should exhibit If you can write a great, sexy rolein the
in his later years, starring in Hitchcock the whole panorama of human emotions: context of a great storythat a big movie
movies and Westerns. Today, Paul Newman cruelty and compassion, tenderness and star is dying to play, you may find your
has made a graceful transition to character humor, self-restraint and impulsiveness, fledgling screenwriting career will explode
roles, and Burt Reynoldsprobably (along frustration and triumph, laughter and tears. (in a good way).
with Redford, Eastwood and Bronson) the The character may be restrained in the way
most popular leading man in films when I he expresses these emotions or over-the- STATON RABIN is a screenwriter and veteran
was growing uphas also shifted over to top, but the feelings should always be
script analyst for screenwriters, major agencies, film
playing this kind of part. boiling below the surface. The characters
Likely, most of the stars we admire today must be passionate in pursuit of their goal. studios and scr(i)pt magazine. Her YA novel Betsy
will shift over to playing character parts Characters who show courage do this not and the Emperor (Simon & Schuster/McElderry
as they grow older. The shift will happen by being emotionless but by acting bravely Books; Fall, 2004) is in development as a film with
naturally because of the aging process and or selflessly despite fear. The plot must
Al Pacino attached to star, and will be followed by
younger stars taking their places. This is provide the hero with enough challenges
also a result of the fact that most actors, and conflicts to exhibit these emotions. another novel for Simon & Schuster, Dr. Miracle, in
young or old, like to be challenged by Thats where knowing how to structure 2005. Ms. Rabin teaches screenwriting at Hudson
the roles they play. Clearly, Hugh Grant your script comes in. In the end, good Valley Writers Center in Sleepy Hollow, NY, and is a
wanted more of a challenge when he took story structure is even more important
frequent guest speaker for Mark DeGasperis classes
on the nuanced lead role in About a Boy, than dialogue in writing a great screenplay.
for which he turned in a fine character-role Stars realize that its not just the role you for screenwriters at The Learning Annex and NYU.
a thriller?
Y
oure alone, on the run. You cant go
home. Armed bad guys are chasing
you. You cant call the cops. You cant
trust anyone.
No, you havent just signed with the
William Morris office. Youre relating to
the protagonist in a thriller. The inno-
cent-on-the-run type thriller movie genre
has not been a particularly popular in the
last few years. All the more reason, many
would say, to now try one! scared, quick and chased by dogs that are student in The Pelican Brief; Harrison Ford
Heres how. trying to catch and kill it. The foxes who was a doctor in The Fugitive, Tom Cruise
Lets start by stating that the single survive do so by being clever (dodging the was a lawyer in The Firm, etc. None of these
most overused but under-defined term in hounds by crossing a stream, running to characters are trained warriors.)
all of Hollywood is the term thriller. This ground, etc.). In an action genre, the hero reacts proac-
overusage of the term is because one could Heres the single biggest dramatic issue tively to the plot danger by fighting.
say that any film that has excitement is a for us as writers to solve if we write a thrill- In the thriller genre, the hero responds
thriller, from High Noon to Alien to The er: Why cant the innocent person being reactively to the plot danger by running.
Matrix: Lactose-Intolerant. After all, they chased just call the police? In the action genre, the hero outguns
deliver thrills, right? Solve that and youve got a really good the villains.
But so does a roller-coaster, or tripping thriller. Examples of thrillers over the years In the thriller genre, the hero outwits
over the dog. So, calling a wide variety of include The Pelican Brief, The Fugitive, The the villains.
films thrillers is conversationally accurate. Firm, Conspiracy Theory, The Client and In the action genre, the hero is a bigger-
But were not just making conversation here. Enemy of the State. In previous decades, clas- than-life character (think: Rambo).
You want to break in, and stay in, as a real sic thrillers include North by Northwest and In the thriller genre, the hero is an aver-
screenwriter. Its important to be very clear- Three Days of the Condor. age person: you or me.
headed about what goes into a certain genre Wait a minute ... didnt Robert Redford But thats the power of the thriller: It
and know its parameters and expectations. pick up a gun and use it in Three Days of the is you or I there on the big screenan
Heres how I define todays thriller genre: Condor? What about the more recent film average schmo thrown into an extraordi-
An innocent civilian accidentally gets The Bourne Identity with Matt Damon? He nary, scary chase. Thrillers may not offer us
information or an object that armed bad was being chased by armed villainsbut he bigger-than-life heroes for the big screen,
guys want. Then he is chased, then outruns, knew how to fight back! So maybe its time but they do offer relatability. Many mov-
then outwits the villains. to compare the action genre to the thriller. ies offer big-screen (bigger-than-life) heroes
In other words, a thriller is a fox hunt. We start by admitting that in the world of and heroines in extraordinary life-and-death
The innocent, average person is the scared movies, action means violence. circumstances (superheroes, Ah-nuld, etc.).
fox; and all the armed villains are the In an action movie, the protagonist is But with a thriller, you get to relate to the
hounds. To win, the fox doesnt turn and usually a trained warrior (a soldier or hero. The bad news, however, is he only
try to violently fight them. Instead, the fox cop as in Rambo or Die Hard). But in the brings average gifts to the story; this kind
runs and uses its wits to survive (triumph). thriller genre, the hero protagonist is a civil- of protagonist doesnt know how to use fire-
In a real fox hunt, the fox is innocent, ian, an innocent. (Julia Roberts was a law arms or how to leap into the air in a karate
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kick, then slowly freeze, spin in the air, then heros infidelity, something with which hes
kick someone through a brick wall. threatened and knows is hanging over the
The good news is the hero can be scared head of his marriage. In thrillers, our worst
and confused, show more emotion, make fears in daily life come true: She finds
mistakes and show real humanity, reacting outfurther driving a wedge between him
like the people in the theater would. and his wife and alienating him from
However, the final, very real challenge to everything he values and needs (The Firm
the screenwriter is that this average-person- and Enemy of the State). (Note: Heroes
turned-movie-protagonist also has to ulti- in thrillers also need really understanding
mately be heroic ... and triumph! He has to wives to forgive them.)
find new brains and guts he never thought The New Partner: Once the protago-
he possessed; and he, in fact, has to emerge nist in a thriller has nowhere to turn, no
alive and victorious at the end. one in his old life he can trust, he makes
He must be averageand then he must a new partner who is sometimes tangen-
win! Thats a hard feeling to have some- tially connected to the plot and can be a
times; hence, the classic popularity of an member of the opposite sex, too: The Firms
average person plunged into a fast-paced Holly Hunter; Enemy of the States Gene
nightmare. Hackman; The Clients Susan Sarandon;
Here are more patterns and charac- Conspiracy Theorys Julia Roberts; The Pelican
teristics (requirements) of thrillers, in no Briefs Denzel Washington; Three Days of the
particular order: Condors Faye Dunaway; North by Northwests
A Slower Start: Other genres put the pro- Eva Marie Saint.
tagonist into the plot faster than a thriller. The Worm Turns: The hero is scared,
Generally, hero meets plot by page 15, but confused, afraid and on the run, chased by
todays thrillers? It is the end of Act One bad guysthen he stops at the end of Act
(pages 30 to 35), with growing suspense, Two and fights back, by first making The
before the protagonists fully understand how Plan. (What Plan?)
dangerous their situations are; in The Firm The Plan: At the halfway point of the
and Enemy of the State, they are even at the movie or even at the end of Act Two (page
mid-point (pages 55 to 60) before they are 85), the scared, running protagonist finally
fully aware that this is life and death! becomes proactive about his problem, not
The First Death: Someone close to the just reactive as hes been thus far. The audi-
protagonist dies early in the story, triggering ence only gets to know and see some, not
the protagonist into a higher level of realiza- all, of his plan as it is being set up, which
tion about the seriousness of it all. Examples is fun and exciting. Then we are surprised
include Sam Shepard in The Pelican Brief; and delighted with how the hero tricks the
the lawyers on the boat in The Firm; the bad guys at the end with some (surprise to
bird watcher in Enemy of the State. us) great plan.
Separation Anxiety: Systematic divest- Using Previous Smarts: This is where
ment of everything connecting the hero the protagonist uses something organic to
to his normal life: he cant go home, go to his background or career, turning it into a
work, use his credit cards, go to his friends weapon against the villain. The hero uses
or family, etc. Past a certain point, the his own real strengths to then go after the
protagonist cant do what we average folk bad guys. (In The Firm, Tom Cruise sets
really would do 99.9 percent of the time: up a legal situation at the end to keep him
Call the cops! safe from the Mafia and also not be arrest-
This escalation of wedges between his ed; in Enemy of the State, Will Smith takes
old, safe life and the new, frightening fox the National Security Agency bad guys to
hunt creates a total modern nightmare: his earlier work problem, the Mafia guy,
alone in the world, cant trust anyone, where they all shoot it out; in The Fugitive,
being chased. In every single thriller, this Harrison Ford returns to his medical prac-
convention is a requirement of the genre: tice to solve the problem of who set him
from North by Northwest to Three Days of up; Robert Redford in Three Days of the
the Condor to the more recent The Fugitive, Condor used his usual background reading
The Firm, The Pelican Brief, The Client, to do the phone company trick.)
Enemy of the State, etc. Why Not Just Call The Cops?: Answer
Past Infidelity: The bad guys some- that one, always. But all it takes is some
times find proof of, or cause to occur, the government official or rich villain who
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BY GRAHAM LUDLOW
Now
What?
Headlines in Daily Variety and The Hollywood Reporter will confirm the fact that you can make a fortune writing screenplays.
The ensuing articles (usually glorified press releases written by overzealous publicists) make it all seem so easy. But as many
of you know, it isnt.
ortunately, times have changed in movie business somehow retains a glamor- PRODUCER PET PEEVES
Hollywood. There are lots of ways ous allure. People think that you can go to Not everybody has access to a fancy col-
for screenwriters to get noticed. It Hollywood without much of an education lege education. Im not suggesting that it is
used to be that they had to query every and become rich. So, it makes sense that a prerequisite for being a screenwriter. But if
appropriate agent in town, hope to get more and more people are going to want I were going to send a screenplay to some-
noticed and pray that an agent would be to try to get into the entertainment busi- body in Hollywood, I would make darned
enthusiastic enough to sign them. But ness. Screenwriting is one of the few jobs sure that (at the very least) I had checked
with the advent of managers/producers and in Hollywood that can be tackled from afar. and rechecked my spelling and grammar.
management/production companiesnot For example, Ive worked in Los Angeles Sadly, not everybody seems to feel that this
to mention an ongoing array of hungry with screenwriters who live in England, is necessary. As a producer, all I can say is
producerswriters have a multitude of Canada and Germany. There are also many that if I read a script and there are typos on
options. East Coast screenwriters, but often they the first page, chances are that I am going
Just last week an agent complained to me come to L.A. for part of the year or to be annoyed. Not only am I going to be
that he was anxious to find some hot, new when needed. Strangely, my own adaptation annoyed, but chances are that I am also
screenwriting talent. He said that it has been of Jack Londons The Call of the Wild was going to immediately judge the material
a difficult search because the queries that produced and shot in Quebec several years and the writer as unprofessional. Once in
come into his agency have decreased. I, like ago. I never left L.A. and performed all of a great while, a concept or story is so good
most other producers, am always looking for my screenwriting services over the telephone that I can get past my annoyance but
the next great screenplay. So why is it that or via the Internet. why would you want to risk somebody
with all of those hungry agents and produc- Unfortunately, with all of the new folks rejecting your story because your script is
ers out there, many writers cant seem to get who want to take a stab at screenwriting, full of typos and grammatical errors?
their screenplays into the right hands? overall quality has definitely suffered. In I strongly suggest that screenwriters who
days gone by, one wouldnt think of saying are not adept at typing, spelling and gram-
EVERYBODY AND HIS UNCLE that one was a screenwriter without a college mar develop a network of friends, relatives
I blame part of this problem on the education. But with all of the how to write and cohorts who are. If you cant get some-
media. The general public has become a screenplay books out there, it appears body you know to go over your screen-
much savvier about the entertainment that the only other tool that you need to play for free, then pay somebody! I cannot
business. A lot of non-industry folks have become a screenwriter is a computer. At emphasize how important it is for you to
started tracking movie grosses and reading least thats the theory. So everybody and his put your best foot forward.
about screenplay sales. More than ever, the uncle wants to give it a shot. I have a second pet peeve as a producer.
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PAGE 68: Producer-screenwriter Graham Ludlow ABOVE: Jim Carrey as Fletcher Reede and Jennifer
Tilly as Samantha Cole in Liar Liar, written by Paul Guay & Stephen Mazur
If you are going to spend the time and some wonderful opportunities. Winning the
the energy to write a screenplay, please right screenplay competition can jumpstart
investigate the format. Screenwriting pro- your career.
grams usually run several hundred dollars. Pitch festivals are a way to meet people
They can guide you. However, I think it is and to get your script into the hands of
extremely important for every screenwriter managers, agents, producers and production
to actually have some real scripts to use as a entities. As a producer, I attend as many of
reference. Most university film departments these as I can. For those of you who have
will have sample screenplays on file, so if not attended, I can tell you that it is an eye-
you cant find a script any other way, this is opening experience. Again, I think that the
usually a safe bet. mistake people make is rushing to a pitch
festival the minute they have completed their
GETTING THROUGH THE first screenplay. Since you typically have five
DOOR minutes with each entity, this is not a wise
Beyond these pet peeves, lets now assume decision. What happens if they dont like
that you have written a screenplay that the concept of your one movie? What are
is impeccably formatted and contains no you going to talk about for the next four-
typos, spelling mistakes or grammatical and-a-half minutes? Im always impressed
errors. Lets also assume that you dont have when a writer can pitch other things if I
an agent or a manager. How are you going dont respond to the first pitch. I also prefer
to get your creation sold or (at the very to be given a one-page synopsis of a pitch
least) noticed? that I like. This should be followed up with
A lot of screenwriters have been discov- a polite e-mail several days later. Dont take
ered as a result of entering a screenplay your screenplay to the pitch session. You
competition (or two). I write a monthly col- want people to be sold on the story and the
umn for Moviebytes.com devoted entirely concept and to request the screenplay once
to screenwriters, and that site offers a com- theyve had a chance to digest it. Give them
prehensive list of almost every screenplay an opportunity to recover from the bom-
competition known to man. Other publica- bardment of ideas that is part and parcel of
tions that are devoted to screenwriting track attending a pitch festival.
particular screenwriting competitions. But Remember that with the increase in
because there are now so many out there, management/production companies, there
you have to be a little bit careful. Look are always folks out there ready to be
for the competitions that have developed approached by less-experienced screenwrit-
a solid reputation. Ive heard some horror ers who may have a solid concept and
stories about upstart production companies screenplay. These entities realize that newer
that try to make money from screenwriters writers often lack the connections to submit
by advertising ongoing screenplay competi- material through the proper channels. Many
tions. Do your research, folks. Dont be lazy. such companies encourage e-mail queries
There are some swindlers, but there are also and advertise on the Web. For example,
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(by an attorney, manager or agent), I will be for only $1). Other agreements to shop
e-mail a release form. This release is my material are not considered binding by the
protection. In order for an independent WGA; but, if the company you are dealing
producer (like me) to read something from with is not signatory to the Guild and you
a writer who is not represented, the writer are not in the Guild, it will suffice because
must be prepared to sign one and mail it these sorts of agreements fall outside the
back with the script. Guilds jurisdiction.
By the way, a lot of producers prefer hard If the requested exclusive period doesnt
copies of the screenplay to be snail-mailed seem outrageous (six months to a year), and
versus receiving a file through the Internet. you feel comfortable with this producer, you
That is because most people prefer the should sign the agreement. It would be nice if
mobility that a screenplay allows the reader you could get an option fee. However, in this
to maintain. Many of us spend day after day highly competitive marketplace, options are
in front of our computer screens and would hard to come by. So, if you find a hard-work-
like to be able to read somewhere else. ing producer that you believe will put energy
into selling your project, go for it! Trust me,
THE FOLLOW-UP QUESTION a smart producer can often be more creative
How long do you wait before following about finding the best way to sell a screenplay
up? This is a tricky question with no right than an agent can be. Usually, agents are too
answer. Everybody handles business differ- busy. Ive heard many a writer bemoan the
ently. Some people read 10 pages of a script; fact that his agent sent his last script to 10
and, if it doesnt excite them, they throw it companies; and when it didnt sell right away,
out. Some people read quickly and respond. the agent lost his enthusiasm.
Some people are slow readers, and it may With all of this information in mind,
take weeks before you hear back from them. dont feel that your options are limited once
Everybody is different. I try to respond in a you have a solid screenplay completed.
timely manner. But not everybody is like me. Knowledge is power, right? I feel certain
If you havent heard back from somebody that Im not the only producer out there
within a couple of months, I think that you who is frustrated by the lack of quality
are entitled to follow up and find out the scripts I receive from agents. Todays strug-
status of your submission. Be prepared for gling producerwho has not yet made a
every eventuality. You may get a rejection. studio blockbusterhas to be extremely
You may hear that the script hasnt been read creative about finding good material. So do
yet, or you may even hear that it was lost on us a favor and seek us out with that next
an airplane by the development executive. great screenplay.
The latter may necessitate the resending of
the script. Id probably be too annoyed to GRAHAM LUDLOW is currently adapting
start the process again but thats just me. the Canadian novel Tracing Iris for Yaletown
Entertainment in Vancouver. He most recently
THE DEAL adapted the childrens novel The House With a
Then theres the day that you get a call Clock In Its Walls for producer Dieter Geissler
from a producer who tells you that he (The Neverending Story). His adaptation of Jack
likes your screenplay. Generally, these calls Londons The Call of the Wild, which starred
are coming from a producer like me who Rutger Hauer and was narrated by Richard
doesnt have a deal at a studio. In many Dreyfuss, received critical acclaim. He recently
instances, the producer may be looking to co-created an animated seriesParty Girls
make a few adjustments to your screenplay. which has been optioned by Klasky/Csupo (The
If the notes make sense to you, I would Rugrats). He produced the highly rated CBS
do them. A manager (who can also be a television movie Anyas Bell (winner of the
producer) is likely to make the same sort of Schepens Eye Research Institutes Vision Award
request. Typically, agents either like some- and nominated for a Humanitas Award), which
thing or they dont. starred Della Reese and is producing the upcom-
A producer who wants to work with ing Sandra Bullock feature Rich Deceiver (based
you on your screenplay may also want upon the BBC miniseries) at Fox 2000. He writes
you to sign a piece of paper that gives a monthly column for Moviebytes.com on his
him an exclusive option or hold on your screenwriting escapades. You may query Colossal
material. An option is not binding unless Entertainment by e-mailing John Fordham,
money exchanges hands (the option could Director of Development, at: clsslent@aol.com
by Joel Haber
T
he process of adapting another film we watch. Thus, the film simultaneous-
authors work into a film can be ly is an adaptation and is about adaptation.
one of the most challenging tasks An examination of the screenplay highlights
a screenwriter will face. But, it also often some of the challenges and issues involved
turns out to be one of the more creative- in the adaptation process.
When Im offered ly rewarding and lucrative ones. So while Kaufmans Adaptation script becomes
William Goldmans two questions should particularly relevant once we recognize how
a piece of work to precede most attempts at adaptation, prevalent adaptations are in todays film
this article looks at how a writer should market. Such films take a variety of forms.
adapt the first approach the task once he finds the answer Admittedly, the Academys definition of
to both of those questions is yes. adaptations is sometimes rather inscrutable
thing I ask is, Do I One of the more intriguing screenplays (Calling O Brother, Where Art Thou? an adap-
of the past few years is Charlie Kaufmans tation of Ulysses is definitely a stretch, though
really love this? The Adaptation, largely due to its examination of it was clearly inspired by Joyces work.); but
the screenwriting process in general and the it generally uses somewhat strict definitions
second question is, adaptation process in particular. At various of what it considers a screenplay adapted
points and on differing levels, the film can from another source. A broader definition
Can I make it play? be seen as addressing no less than four dif- of adaptation, however, would encompass a
ferent adaptationschronologically: Susan large percentage of the films released each
Orleans adaptation of John Laroches story year. A quick glance at Hollywood releases
William Goldman into an article; her adaptation of her own over the past year show films adapted from
article into a book; the character Kaufmans TV series, previously released feature films
attempt to adapt the book as a screenplay; (remakes), short films, comic books, maga-
and lastly, actual screenwriter Kaufmans zine and newspaper articles, books, short sto-
adaptation of his real-life struggles into the ries, stage plays, videogames and real life. This
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past summers hit Pirates of the Caribbean was begin adapting your skills to the adaptation exchange for the opportunity to have entry
an adaptation of a theme park ride. In fact, process. For example, people sometimes write into the world of film. Such a process could
one of the more peculiar deals of the past script adaptations to use as writing samples even mark the dawn of a healthy and pro-
year involved the purchase of rights to adapt even without holding the rights to the source ductive working relationship.
a pop song (Avril Lavignes Sk8er Boi) into material. However, this may not be the wisest
a feature. idea as writing samples do occasionally get THE JOURNEY
picked up for production (e.g. Kaufmans first So, now youve chosen the source mate-
A SKILL ANY SCREENWRITER produced screenplay, Being John Malkovich). rial. What is the best method by which to
SHOULD HAVE Thus, if your script is that good, a produc- embark upon the journey of adaptation?
In its broadest definition, in fact, nearly tion company could be disappointed when In many ways, the process parallels the
every film Hollywood produces may be it learns it is actually unavailable. What are screenwriting process overall, but there are
seen as an adaptation of sorts. Almost every your other options? some specific and important differences that
screenplay that studios buy goes through make adapting unique. Naturally, the most
at least one rewrite during development. ADAPTATION OPTIONS important question one must ask with any
Many of these are rewritten by screenwriters Many older books currently reside in the script is, What is this film really about?
other than those with whom the material public domain, and thus one does not need However, though any screenwriter must ask
originated. Thus, the rewriters are actually to buy rights to sell a screenplay based upon this question about any project on which he
engaged in the process of adapting a screen- one of them. If youve got an idea for an is working, in an adaptation the question
play from a screenplay. The process remains action picture based upon Beowulf, go ahead takes a different form. Generally, a screen-
essentially the same whether one is adapting and write it. Writing a biopic is another writer starts from an idea and builds the
a script from a novel or from some other good option requiring one to examine a story around it. In an adaptation, however,
written source. persons life, find its core and alter the life you start from a story and must dig into it
Clearly, it would therefore behoove any story when necessary. On a microcosmic to find the idea that lies at its center. The
screenwriter to become adept at adapting. level, this process virtually duplicates that question in an adaptation becomes, What
Still, the likelihood of an aspiring or new of the adaptation process overall. Similarly, is the core idea of this story?
screenwriters having an opportunity to write screenplays based upon actual historical In Adaptation, the Charlie Kaufman char-
a film adaptation is, of course, unlikely. events (as opposed to contemporary stories, acter spends a lot of time researching as
Rights to source material can be prohibi- which may require rights agreements) usu- he struggles with the screenplay, trying to
tively expensive, and most people would ally offer solid opportunities to write adap- learn as much as possible about orchids.
consider it somewhat foolish to write such tations without expensive rights purchases. He sees orchids as central to the story; they
a script on spec. Similarly, few studios will Finally, get to know other young writers, are what lie at the core of Orleans book.
hire an unproven, first-time writer to adapt particularly playwrights. There are many Uniquely, in the world of adapted screen-
a novel other than one he wrote. So how small-scale plays written each year, and some plays, he concludes that the only way to
should the beginning screenwriter practice of them could form solid source material stay true to the core idea of the book is to
what could eventually become one of his for screenplays. Less established playwrights actually abandon the source materials story.
most lucrative skills? may be more willing to negotiate a rights The screenplay mentions that the key to
Luckily, you have multiple opportunities to deal for little or no money up front in what makes orchids special is evolution
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Maybe you want to add a foil character that the worst justifications a writer can use is, to not write the script at all. Remember
is missing in the source. Or perhaps you But thats how it happened! Who cares? Goldmans second question when consider-
feel a character needs better motivation or Lots of things happen in boring ways every ing an adaptation: Can I make it play? If
you want to make a characters traits more day. That doesnt mean anyone wants to not, drop it and look to a different source.
visual. You might merely need to flesh out part with $10 to watch them play out Thus, the adaptation process really boils
a thinly plotted source. These are all pos- onscreen. Minor changes in biopics are per- down to four main questions: What is the
sible benefits to adding new material into fectly acceptable and are even expected. If core idea of the property? What should I
your script. You dont have to go as far as your property calls for more fundamental cut out? What should I add? How should I
Kaufman did in creating his own imaginary changes to the truth, you have two options. change the source material to make a stron-
twin brother as a foil, but remember that One is to change enough details that your ger film? In fact, any screenwriter would
you have free reign as long as it works and story is merely inspired by reality. Change be wise to apply these same questions to the
helps make the film stronger. the names and you have a great story that editing and rewriting of his own screenplay.
A similar but different question to ask is, just resembles a true story. Theres no rea- If we can divorce ourselves from our own
How can I improve the story? Examine son to avoid these changes unless there is material enough to feel as if we were adapt-
the source material with a critical eye. What enough of a built-in audience that wants to ing and rewriting someone elses script, well
doesnt work? How can I make it stron- see the actual story. be better equipped to edit with the harsh
ger? The possibilities are virtually endless. There are plenty of films loosely based and open-minded judgment that such a task
Ask, What if? and see where the answer upon real life. Almost Famous is a good, truly requires.
takes you. What if this character were a recent example. In fact, there are those
girl instead of a boy? This alone may be who believe a film such as A Beautiful JOEL HABER is a professional script analyst, and has
enough to change a derivative tale into an Mind departed so far from reality, it would
read for mini-majors, smaller production companies,
original one. What if we set it in a differ- have been better off changing the names
agencies and screenplay competitions. With nearly
ent city? The book High Fidelity was set of its central characters. Its hard to argue
a decade of film industry experience and an MA in
in London, not in Chicago as was the film with Oscar, but the film could have been
version. What if we retold the story in a just as strong and perhaps even more prof- Media Studies, he is a recent NYC to L.A .transplant,
contemporary setting? Look at the results in itable if it had been more fictionalized. allowing him to focus more on writing screenplays.
such films as West Side Story, Clueless or 10 Your second option when a true story He may be contacted for script consulting services at
Things I Hate About You. There is a reason requires fundamental changes is, of course, JoelHaber@yahoo.com
you are adapting this source material, and
that reason is not in the details but in the
concept. No producer will buy a book with
great dialogue but a boring and unimagina-
tive story. If, however, a property has poor
dialogue and one-dimensional characters but
a solidly inventive plot, a good adapter can
lay better characters on top of that plot and
have them speak unique and believable dia-
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Clichs: shot, stabbed and blown up but survives,
The cop/detective/soldier/agent/special only to keel over in the last scene when the Its about the dream...
operative/garbage man protagonist who protagonist sneezes on him for no other rea- Its about your potential...
refuses to go by the book. son than its time for the movie to end. I t s a b o u t t h e P R O C E S S !
The cop/detective/soldier/agent/special Killing the villain by dropping him from
operative/garbage man protagonist who a great height.
refuses to work with a partner until, of
course, one is forced upon him.
The sidekick who stands loyally by the
protagonists side throughout the entire film
The
The protagonist who has experienced a but then, at the end of the second act, is Complete
tragic loss/trauma in his past in circum- revealed to have been in cahoots with the Screenplay
stances that mirror the situation in which villain all along. (This one wins the Ray
he now finds himself. The protagonists tri- Morton Drive-The-Reader-Insane Award for
umph in the present repairs the damage the Most Overused Action Movie Clich of Sally B. Merlin,
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is inevitably described by his superiors as days/20 days/one week left until retirement. She is known as a person who
being a highly trained killing machine, No need to file those pension papersthis finds emerging talent, nurtures it,
a secret/lethal/unlicensed weapon or (my guy is doomed.
and finds it a home. She has been
favorite) the best there is. The Red Herring that is initially por-
The Extremely Cultured-To-The-Point- trayed as being so obviously guilty that instrumental in the careers of some
Of-Being-Effete Eurotrash Villain who pos- theres no way he can be and, conversely, of Hollywoods most exceptional
sesses more wit, charm and taste than you the Innocuous Character who is portrayed talent. Kathleen Kennedy, President,
and I will ever have. as being so squeaky clean that theres no
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forgiven the underling for his transgression. atomic particles, create 3-D models of every
Witty, dark-humored one-liners spouted object known in the universe, and enhance,
by either the protagonist or the antagonist enlarge and clarify even the fuzziest photo-
at key moments in the storyusually right graphs to the point where you can clearly
after someone has been killed in a particu- see the microscopic evidence that proves
larly nasty or unusual way. the subject is guiltyall on a battery that
The spill-it-all speech in which the vil- apparently lasts forever.
lain reveals every detail of his top-secret Scenes in which the protagonist crawls
plan to the protagonist as he places the through ventilation ducts to escape, pursue
protagonist into some elaborate, seemingly or sneak around the antagonist. Have you
inescapable death trap. The villain then ever actually seen a ventilation duct? Theyre
inexplicably departs before making sure that very thin, narrow and are held up by a few
the death trap has actually killed the pro- weak bolts. You cant crawl through them.
tagonist, allowing the protagonist to escape Heck, you cant even fit in them.
and then use the villains own information Well, thats it for this column. Well finish
to foil his plan. Youve got to wonder when up in the next issue. Happy writing!
villains are going to learn to clam up, shoot
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SALES FORCE for Peter Gubers Mandalay Pictures to produce. The comedy
focuses on a psychiatrist whose life gets turned upside down when
Who Sold What he inherits the disorders of his group therapy patients. Head Games
is the second spec Cohen and Lord have sold since changing
to Whom and for occupations. Last spring, Summit bought their first effort, Black
Sabbath, a horror film about a cop who has to escape from hell.
How Much? Lord had been a producer, and Cohen spent time as a development
executive at Mike Ovitzs Artists Production Group. While focusing
SPECS on his screenwriting career, Lord has continued as a producer for a
Paramount Pictures has purchased The Girl Who Could Fly, a spec few projects. He and producing partner Matt Weaver are working
script by Victoria Lakeman, at mid-six figures for Michael Aguilar on The Harlem Globetrotter Story for Columbia Pictures and Davis
and Dean Georgaris to produce. The script is set in a fantastical Entertainment. Penny Marshall is attached to direct that project,
Roald Dahl-style world and centers on a precocious 11-year-old farm with CSI creator Anthony Zuiker scripting. At DreamWorks, Lord
girl who discovers she can fly and is then detained by the Ministry of and Weaver are developing The Seven-Day Itch, a remake of Elaine
Anomalous Developmental Needs and Extra-normal Social Services Mays classic The Heartbreak Kid. Cohen and Lord are repped by
(also known as Madness). Shes then sent to the ministrys Institute Broder-Webb-Chervin-Silbermann and Flashpoint Entertainment.
of Normality, Stability and Non-Exceptionality (also know as Insane)
located underneath the Arctic tundra, with the goal of normalizing Media 8 Entertainment and Brett Ratners Rat Entertainment
children by barring them from using their abnormalities. There the have joined to produce the horror comedy Santas Slay, written and
girl inspires a revolt among her other gifted classmates/inmates. to be directed by David Steiman. In Santas Slay, St. Nick turns
Lakemans previous writing credits include Cry of the White Wolf and out to be a devil who only kept his bad side in check after losing
Captain Justice for producer Roger Corman. She was repped in the a wager with an angel. Now, both the bet and Santas good cheer
deal by International Creative Management. are over. Steiman, who will make his feature writing and directing
debut with the project, is Ratners former assistant. Ratner and
Executives-turned-scribes David Cohen and Tony Lord have JoAnn Perritano will produce the project at Media 8. Executive
sold their spec Head Games in a six-figure deal to Universal Pictures producers are Matthew Leonetti Jr. and Andrew Pfeffer.
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Paramount Pictures has obtained Au Pair, along the route. The film is being produced in the deal by Energy Entertainment and
a thriller that will star Mandy Moore, for an by Jennifer Klein, who last October set manager Brooklyn Weaver.
undisclosed amount. The project is being up the production shingle Apartment 3B
referred to as a reverse The Hand That Rocks Prods., and is being overseen by MGM Radar Pictures has optioned the spec
the Cradle, with Moore playing a teen who President of Production Toby Jaffe and exec- screenplay The Brutus Complex by 23-year-
takes a job watching two children in what utive Eric Baires. Turner was repped in the old Ari Rubin to be produced with his
seems like an ideal household. Instead, she deal by Endeavor, managers Benderspink father, Bruce Joel Rubin. The story con-
finds deception and danger. The project and attorney David Fox. cerns a U.S. secretary of state who uncov-
came together as a co-production between ers hidden forces pushing his administra-
Landscape Entertainments Bob Cooper and Paramount Pictures has purchased the tion into a war. He must take on the entire
Crispy Films President Jonathan Schwartz. comedy spec Honeymoon From Hell from government and risk his life to expose
Karen Lunder will also produce. The deal first-time writer Mark Colby Yosowitz for the truth. Joe Rosenberg will produce for
came with a first script draft that was writ- low-six to mid-six figures. Kelsey Grammer Radar Pictures, and Radar owner Ted Field
ten by Judy Klass, a Brooklyn-based writer is set to produce through his Paramount- will executive produce. The Rubins are
and professor who created the concept. The based Grammnet shingle. The story focuses repped by Creative Artists Agency.
studio will seek a writer to pen a new draft on a bride and groom who, after breaking
as well as a new title. off their wedding, decide to bring their PITCHES
respective bridesmaid and best man to their Paramount Pictures has bought the come-
Scribe Sheldon Turner has sold his thrill- exotic honeymoon with neither know- dy pitch Dirty Little Secret as a starring vehi-
er spec Scrawl to MGM Pictures in a mid- ing that the other is at the same location. cle for Matthew McConaughey. Although
six against high-six-figure deal. The story Yosowitz wrote the script as his own wed- specifics of the deal are unknown, Elisa Bell
follows a disgraced detective who takes a ding approached as a possible worst-case sce- will pen the script for a movie that explores
menial job delivering cash to ATMs at rest nario. Grammer and Senior Vice President the absurdity of parenting. Dirty Little Secret
stops along a rural Georgia highway. His of Feature Development Joanne Asquith looks at the lives of a hip, successful couple
monotony is broken when he believes Weiss will produce while producer-manager overwhelmed by the arrival of their first
based on desperate messages scrawled at the Brooklyn Weaver of Energy Entertainment baby. Tensions build
rest stopsthat a girl has been abducted will executive produce. Yosowitz was repped
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between them as they exit high society to Prods. is producing. The writers other proj- Miramax has bought the comedy pitch
enter the world of nannies and preschool ects in development include Rich Girl (also Bride Wars for an undisclosed amount.
waiting lists. The project will be produced an original pitch), with Debra Martin Chase The project will be written by scribe Greg
by McConaughey and his j.k. livin partner producing at Disney, and A Season in Central DePaul (Saving Silverman). With Kate
Gus Gustawes, along with Mad Chances Park at Warner Bros., also for Outlaw Prods. Hudson already signed on to produce and
Andrew Lazar. Mark Gustawes is co-pro- Producer Laura Hopper will produce Father star, Bride Wars pits two best friends in a
ducing, and Damien Saccani is executive Knows Less, which is based upon her origi- clash over their respective wedding plans.
producing. Bell, repped by William Morris nal idea. McKenna was repped in the deal Hudson and her Cosmic Entertainment
Agency, previously scripted the Revolution by the literary agency Hohman Maybank partner Jay Cohen are producing, along
comedy Little Black Book, and the MGM Lieb. with Alan Riche and Tony Ludwig. DePaul
Pictures comedy Sleepover. had the idea for the project and polished it
Dimension Films and producer Todd with his Nine Yards Entertainment manager
New Line Cinema has acquired the pitch Phillips have made a preemptive acquisi- Matt Luber, wholl be executive producer.
Father Knows Less, a contemporary comedy tion of a comic pitch by scribe Ricky Blitt Miramax executive Laura Rister and co-
about American fatherhood by Aline Brosh for mid-six figures. The untitled project President of Production Meryl Poster will
McKenna. The screenwriter most recently is described as a comedy about a youths oversee the project for the studio. DePaul is
wrote Laws of Attraction for the studio. In infatuation with an older woman. The film repped by Nine Yards Entertainment.
Father Knows Less, a successful but detached will be produced by Phillips, Alan Riche and
dad on his second marriage is abandoned John Jacobs. Blitt is best known for writing Warner Bros. Pictures has bought the
by his young, fed-up trophy wife. Hes The Ringer, the Fox comedy about a man comedy pitch Unaccompanied Minors from
left to raise his young kids on his own, who attempts to fix the Special Olympics by the Donners Co. and WBEZ Alliance, the
occasionally relying on the guidance of his entering the competition. Barry Blaustein is producing arm of the radio program This
disaffected older offspring from his failed directing the project, with Johnny Knoxville American Life. Although specifics of the
first marriage. New Line production execu- playing the title character and Jacobs pro- deal are unknown, Mya Stark will direct
tive Michele Weiss is overseeing the proj- ducing with Conundrum partners Peter and the project and, with Jacob Meszaros, write
ect. McKenna also recently sold the pitch Bobby Farrelly and Bradley Thomas. Blitt is a script based on a TAL episode broadcast
27 Dressesa romantic comedy backed by repped by ICM. January 6, 2001. In the nine-minute essay,
Spyglasswhich Bobby Newmyers Outlaw writer Susan Burton described a childhood
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experience of being snowed in at Chicagos rupt the planets ecosystem and uninten-
OHare Airport the day after Christmas, tionally create a race of genetically altered,
stranded with several other kids from Grendel-type creatures. John Williams is
divorced families who spent the holidays producing the project under his Vanguard
flying from one parent to the other. Warner Films banner. The book, written by Larry
Bros. Vice President Dan Lin will oversee Niven, Jerry Pournelle and Steven
the project. Lauren Shuler Donner will pro- Barnes, was optioned by Williams about
duce with Michael Aguilar and WBEZs Ira a year ago and, along with Moreland, they
Glass and Julie Snyder. Stark and Meszaros developed the script. The two recently
are repped by Endeavor. set up the comedy Pink Slip together at
DreamWorks. Jon Levin at CAA repped
In a preemptive bid, New Line Cinema both Moreland and Williams in the deal.
has acquired the sci-fi action-comedy
pitch Planet Terry by comic creator Rob Scott Rosenberg, who brought Men in
Liefeld in a mid-six against seven-figure Black from comic book to the big screen,
deal. Liefeld is the co-founder of Image has optioned two independent comics for
Comics, the third largest publisher after his production company Platinum Studios.
D.C. and Marvel. The story centers on a The studio will create live-action versions
middle-aged family man in extraordinary of the graphic novel The Dark Fringe, cre-
circumstancesin the vein of movies such ated, written and inked by Eman R. Torre
as Bruce Almighty and Liar Liar. Planet Terry and published by Atomic Rocket Prods.,
was to be Liefelds next online comic series, and Rust, created by Steve Miller. In Dark
following the sale of his previous online Fringe, a cop investigates the death of his
series Shrink!, which Jennifer Lopez is both wife; after he believes he has solved the
producing from her Nuyorican shingle and crime, the alleged killer promises to lead the
attached to topline for Columbia Pictures. cop to the man who did the deed. Its up to
Keith Goldberg will oversee development the cop to decide whether to trust the man
for the studio, along with Michele Weiss who appears to be her killer. Rust focuses
and Kent Alterman. Liefeld is repped on a police officer, covered in metal after
by Energy Entertainment and manager an accident, who is attempting to regain
Brooklyn Weaver. his humanity. Afraid to show his disfigure-
ment in public, his sculptures bring him
The Walt Disney Co. has paid six figures some acclaim. Rust has been published by
to obtain the pitch Rescued! from scribes three different outlets, among them Malibu
Jack Angelo and Sam Brown. The story Comics, which Rosenberg created and ran
centers on the lovelorn teenage daughter before selling to Marvel.
of South Floridas most feared INS agent,
who accidentally rescues a cute illegal alien Digital Domain and Barnet Bain Films
from the ocean and hides him in the family have optioned author Dan Simmons sci-
home. Josie Rosen/FP Ventures brought fi novel Ilium and its sequel, Olympos, to
the pitch to Disney Senior Vice President adapt into a feature film. Simmons will
of Production Brad Epstein, who will over- also write the screenplay. Published in July
see the project for the studio. Angelo and by the Eos imprint of HarperCollins, Ilium
Brown are also writing Lucky for New Line is an epic sci-fi tale that covers 5,000 years
Cinema with Karz Entertainment produc- and sweeps across the entire solar system;
ing, and are rewriting Happily Ever After for it contains themes and characters from
producer Mark Johnson and Intermedia. Homers The Iliad and Shakespeares The
The writing pair is repped by ICM. Tempest. Olympos will be released in 2005,
providing Iliums producers with a potential
BOOKS franchise. Producer Barnet Bain brought
United Artists has gained rights to Ilium to Digital Domain President Scott
the sci-fi thriller Legacy, an adaptation Ross. The two will produce the project,
written by Rob Moreland based on the and Simmons will serve as an executive
1958 book The Legacy of Heorot. Legacy, producer. Simmons is repped by Richard
described as Beowulf in space, is about Curtis Associates and The Firm. Molly
how the first Earth expedition becomes a Hansen negotiated the deal on behalf of
fight for survival when the colonists dis- Digital Domain.
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n my life, I have been privileged to work with extraordinary scended social limitations and gender misconceptions of their era
writers. Each experience has provided me with an amalgamation to make history.
of insight and inspiration. I believe every instance has made me
a better person. Being able to witness a creative moment is surely During World War II, over 1,000 women were trained by the
the greatest gift an individual can receive. There is a single moment military to ferry planes and fly combat missions. Thirty-nine of
where the writers struggle takes form. The act of creation is, in the these women gave their lives in the service of their country. These
end after all the struggle, pure joy. are the facts. The challenge for me as a teacher was being involved
in the writers experience of realizing these women on the page. The
Recently, I was allowed the opportunity to participate in a project challenge for the writer was to orchestrate the roles of seven women
very close to my heart. I had the chance to work with a woman who (two leads) and five men in the scriptnot an easy task, but a deli-
had written a script of great meaning. I sincerely hope that the project cious one. The idea was to utilize each character to embody a precise
will get made. What was most satisfying about this undertaking was purpose. Purpose is what motivates any character in any film.
being able to experience the three most enjoyable aspects of teaching
screenwriting: to educate, illuminate and inspire. Working with a writer always allows me the benefit of learning
something new and wonderful, but this project was entirely differ-
Those of you who read my column know that these three elements ent for the following reason: The film was based upon a little-known
of teaching have always been my motivation for staying in the busi- piece of history that, for whatever reason, has remained under the
ness. I believe that cinema is the most potent means of educating an popular radar. It doesnt really matter why this incident has been
audience and is the art form that has the potential to most effectively overlooked, but perhaps (and Ill go out on a limb here) the reason
capture the human spirit. Despite this potential, the sad truth is that is because it was a historical episode about women.
not often enough are we able to leave the theater feeling inspired by
what we saw on the screen. I always need to reaffirm my belief that great stories do find
their way into the world, and working on this recent project gave
The work from the writer on the aforementioned project (and me a shot of hope. The thrill of this project was knowing that (at
yes, the studio, too) has restored my hope for future generations of this point) the film will be made; knowing my six-year-old grand-
writers. Make no mistake, the writing isnt great because the film daughter and my best friends unborn child will see brave women
was based upon historical fact or had a glossy high concept. The celebrated onscreen. Watching the transformation from script to
writing is great because the script is based firmly on full-bodied, screen become complete is the glory of writing for film, but its so
well-crafted characters. The characters who come alive in this script rare that any of us gets to realize this goal.
are rich, vibrant women of the 1940s who took a risk and made a
commitment to their country. They jumped the proverbial chasm Oh, and did I mention: The noblest aspect of working on this
and made a difference in history. I am not suggesting that there project was having the opportunity to watch a woman writer write
werent men who helped them. There were. What I am saying is women into history?
that the real women upon whom the films premise is based tran-
Merlin
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