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Choosing a study road

During our lifetime, we have asked ourselves the following question: What do we want to be when
we grow up? Nevertheless, a good question would be: will we be what we want to be or what our
parents, the world or even the economy believe suitable to our future? The same thing occurs when
college students have to choose their field of study. In that case, some people believe that college
students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others
believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in
that field.

Considering the selection of a field of study based on the availability of jobs as the best option
instead of taking into account their talents and interests , the average career salary will decrease and
the difficult to get the first job will increase. For instance when it happens, and considering the
graduate college students and their average base salary as a good and it unit price, respectively. It
likely occurs a scene where the supply will be higher than the demand thus the average base salary
will decrease as well as the amount of graduate students seeking for their first job will be higher. On
the contrary, the low amount of students whom selection was based on their talents and interests
will be very appreciated in an employment market.

On the other hand, graduate college students whom field of study was based on their talents and
interests will have a wider vision than the students that just took into account the job market, when
it comes to changing job. This behavior is because the graduate students based on the job market
have a clear trend of ever finding the best option to increase their economical income without taking
into consideration other aspects (e.g. work environment, professional growth opportunities,
workmates, etc.).

Finally, choosing a field of study based on the talents and interests will likely assure a deeper
understanding in a field of study than considering availability of jobs. It is clear that any person
including college students becomes expert in their field of interest (e.g. art, music, science, sports,
etc.). Furthermore, this sometimes is the beginning to state even research problems that could turn
into a significant progress in human development. However, it does not mean the graduate students
based on job market do not develop research problems; the problem appears when the money is
gone because this moment means the curiositys end.

In conclusion, the college students should choose a field of study taking into account their talents
and interests instead of considering the job market due to the chance to enter in lighter job market
with a great average base salary, to reach a wide vision about a job, and to achieve a deeper
understanding in a field of study.
Review Classmates
Sheila Marie Villamor
I had a hard time finding for a clue for the keyword in the Thesis Statement about compare and
contrast. The introduction was good but needs some improvement. You have to be specific because
in your thesis statement you could have said about "choosing a field of study based on talents and
interest is better than studying for a particular course for a job security" so that the reader will be
able to identify its difference. It looks like you are discussing both sides of the argument and not
comparing.

Sheila Marie Villamor


The thought is already there in all 4 paragraphs and it only needs to improve in terms of grammar
and coherence. Maybe choice of words that are appropriate.

Sheila Marie Villamor


I think it needs a little improvement on vocabulary.

Sophie Zhang
I think you grasp the main idea of compare/contrast essay writing. But there are still some little
mistakes. I might be wrong, because I am a learner as well. 1- On the other hand, graduate college
students whom field of study was based on their talents and interests will have a wider vision than
the students that just took into account the job market, when it comes to changing job. (Whom
might be used wrongly) 2-For instance when it happens, and considering the graduate college
students and their average base salary as a good and it unit price, respectively. (for instance should
be followed with a ',') On the whole, you are doing really great! I think I would admire you for you
depth of thinking and knowledge of that topic :)

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