Report

Question
Your local community group is interested in the views that local people hold about crime in
your area. You have been asked to write a report for the chairman of the community group.
You should address the following points:

What crimes are the most worrying for young people?

What steps can be taken to make young people feel less afraid?

Write your report for the chairman. (around 280 - 320 words)

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Maryland Heights Crime Situation

As requested, this is a report about crime rates in Maryland Heights and young
people's attitude to the problem. 200 young people aged 18-25 were asked to share
their opinion on the current crime situation. The results of the survey are presented
below together with recommendations on how to solve existing problems.

Mugging and assault

Physical violence is the most frequent crime being committed in the area. 20% of those
questioned reported having been either assaulted or mugged. Young people complain
of certain areas being particularly dangerous due to the absence of proper lighting and
reliable security. Therefore, it is advised that additional street lamps and surveillance
cameras should be installed and police patrolling the streets should be organized.

Drug dealing and gangs

Another problem that the community is facing is that of drug dealing. It is rooted most
likely in the gang activity in the town. The members of the gang choose their targets
among schoolchildren and students 10% of the latter confirmed either being offered
drugs or having seen others being offered them. To stop it, we suggest monitoring the
gang more closely and making arrests whenever drug dealing is suspected of taking
place. Besides this creating comfortable conditions for people to be able to report drug
dealing safely and anonymously could also help in eradicating the danger.

Conclusion

The survey showed that on the whole young people are reluctant to consider the area
safe, which means that high crime rates and their causes should be investigated
further for more sufficient details. Meanwhile, the safety measures suggested above
could be implemented to change the situation for the better as quickly as possible. We
hope that this report will receive your serious consideration and necessary steps will
be taken in the near future.