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Answer below is a response to Academic Writing Task 1a, More Popular
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The chart below shows the number of men and women

in further education in Britain in three periods and


whether they were studying full-time or part-time. W
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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting
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the main features, and make comparisons where
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“ The chart shows how many male and female
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students were studying full-time or part-time
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in further education in Britain between EA
1970/71 and 1990/91. Overall, the vast KI
majority of students were part-time and there NG CRITERIA
were more students in 1990/91 than in EXPLAINED
1970/71, especially women.

Looking rstly at part-time versus full-time


HO
study, it is clear that most students were part- W
time in each year shown in the chart. The TO
number of part-time students was over GE
700,000 per gender per year, going as high as T
1.1 million, whereas for full-time study the
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number was between 70,000 and 250,000.

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Moving on to look at gender di erences, IEL


numbers of female students increased in both TS
full-time and part-time education whereas the SP
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decreased. For example, there were 70,000
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full-time and about 750,000 part-time female
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students in 1970/71, but by 1990/91 these
numbers had risen to over 200,000 full-time
and around 1.1 million part-time. The number
of male full-time students also went up from
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around 100,000 in 1970/71 to over 200,000 in
SP
1990/91, whereas for part-time study their
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numbers went down from 1 million in 1970/71 KI
to around 850,000 in 1980/81, before rising NG TEST
slightly to about 900,000 in 1990/91. SAMPLES WITH
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PART 1
IELTS Writing Marking Criteria
and Task 1
Remember the IELTS Writing Marking Criteria? Read the IEL
essay again and ask yourself these questions for each of TS
the following criteria: SP
EA
Task Achievement 
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1
Is there a clear overview of the main trends and/or
di erences?

Are all the key features described?


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Coherence and Cohesion TOPICS PART 2

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Is the information organised logically?

Is there a range of linking words and phrases?

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Is there a range of vocabulary?

Are there any examples of less common vocabulary


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and collocations?
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SP
Grammatical Range and Accuracy EA
KI
Is there a variety of structures? NG TOPICS PART
Are there frequent error-free sentences? 3

The answer to all of the above questions is ‘Yes’, which is


why this answer is Band 9. You can use the questions IEL
above to review your own essays and improve your IELTS TS
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Lisa says TE
October 14, 2018 at 07:35 NI
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While this description is very well written, I would have to INTRODUCTION
disagree with you that it would be a band 9 IELTS essay.

This is because in terms of Task Achievement, it is true


that it has the overview and description of the main IN
trends, but it is missing the conclusion/summary of the TR
graph in the conclusion. Without this summary, the TA OD
cannot be fully achieved. UC
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James Paul says


October 18, 2018 at 11:15
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Thanks for your comment, but I have to disagree AD
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conclusion.
Task Achievement is fully achieved if you present a

clear overview and describe all the key features. IN


You can nd the full assessment criteria for WT1 TR
here: https://www.ielts.org/-/media/pdfs/writing- OD
band-descriptors-task-1.ashx?la=en UC
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Bruce says
January 9, 2019 at 23:55
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Yeah . Don’t even think about a conclusion in task 1 . WR
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Nauman khan says


January 30, 2019 at 22:25 HO
W
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The bar chart illustrate the number of both gender in DE
either full time or part time education over three VE
di erent years having a gap of 10 years between each LOP YOUR

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period. VOCABULARY
Overall, an increasing trend was seen in regards of FOR IELTS
fulltime education for both males and females. Also ,the

same inclination was followed by femalesABOUT JOIN HERE


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education but a variant trend came for male part time


HO
education over those years. W
The males and females numbers in full time education TO
were around 100 and 75 thousands respectively in IM
1970/71,that rose slightly to about 150 thousands and PR
above 200 thousands in 1980/81 and 1990/90 but for
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females that number went double in 1980/91 followed by

a slight increase in next ten years.


On other hand ,the number were much more higher in
part time education as compared to full time. for
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females, it increased steadily from 700 thousands to a
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little above 800 thousands from 1970/71 to 1980/81 and
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it then shot up to almost 50% in 1990/91.In contrast ,the

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850thousands from 1970/71 to 1980/81 but it then
increased slightly in 1990/91.

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