Price 1 Jenna Price Mrs.

Caruso ENGL1101 30 October 2011

Genre Recreation
The original text for the rhetorical analysis was the iPhone 4. This was the chosen text because Tthe iPhone is very popular and several people may not know what the device is capable of doing. The features of the smartphone were explained very thoroughly. It is a highlyvery intelligent piece of technology that needs very little improvement. When asked to change the iPhone 4 to a different genre it was a struggle because the iPhone 4 appears to be perfect. It seemed smart to recreate the iPhone into a text that presented itself to be just as smart, if not smarter. For the genre recreation, the iPhone 4 is going to be recreated into a GPS. This presentation will not only present the GPS, as well as but the iPhone, and too. It will advertise the iPhone by having the same characteristics as the GPS. It will be able to do the exact same thing as the iPhone, but the GPS part is highlighted making it the main topic. The things a GPS is capable of doing makes it almost as smart as the smartphone. Simply type in an address to the desired destination and depend on the GPS to get you there in the least amount of time possible. The GPS allows you to choose your desired routes, or it can be programed to always take you the quickest route. The GPS is smart enough to detect heavy traffic and reroute to a faster direction. For someone who attends a particular vacation spot often, but still struggles to learn the directions; type in the address one time to your intelligent GPS, press add to favorites and the address will never have to be typed in again. On every GPS there is a home button. Program
Comment [BC5]: This is quite choppy. Work on combining the sentences and giving a main idea. Comment [BC4]: You already did it. Comment [BC1]: Take this out. You should not include references to your other assignments. Comment [BC2]: Take this out. Comment [BC3]: You repeat very in this sentence.

Price 2 the GPS to your home address and no matter the location, press the home button and the GPS will go straight back home. Young people need to become more knowledgeable about what exactly a GPS is capable of doing and how important it is to have one. Therefore, more attention needs to be brought to this talented device. With a GPS, getting lost is no such thing. Mentioned earlier in the paper, Tthe GPS presented in the short story will contain all of the same features that the iPhone 4 has except for the main function will be to give direction instead of a device to make phone calls. It will be quite smaller than your normal sized GPS and come in many different colors. This is brought to the audiences attention because the iPhone can only be bought in black or white. This GPS that will be presented is the same size of an iPhone 4. The GPS is going to be presented through a short story. Dan, aA young boy who just received his license, will receive a GPS for his sixteenth birthday. The boys name is Dan. His parents struggled with what brand of GPS they should buy for Dan or if they should even buy one at all. Dans parents debate on whether or not he will value the GPS and actually use it or if it will be a waste of their money,A friend of the family recommended they buy one of his old GPS that he had in the basement before buying a brand new one, just to make sure Dan will truly use his GPS. Dans parents thought that was a brilliant idea. Dan is supposed to be attending a school event while all of his friends take off to the beach for spring break. Dan has no ordinary GPS. This particular GPS begins to speak to Dan and carry on a conversation. Dan is a bit freaked out at first. This GPS reads Dans mind and reroutes him to the beach! Slowly, Dan starts to figure out he can just tell the GPS where to go without typing in the address. Whether Dan is in a hurry or not, the GPS will already know! Dan tries multiple times to show his friends the talking GPS, but of course he looks somewhat
Comment [BC6]: Rather than concentrating on the features of a GPS in your defense, work on discussing how the GPS technology is featured in the short story. Comment [BC7]: Rather than beginning with summary, work to begin your paragraphs with your main ideas. Comment [BC8]: Combine these ideas.

Price 3 dumb because the GPS will only speak for Dan. Eventually, Dan and his GPS become extremely close. It becomes a huge ordeal when Dans parents try to buy him a brand new GPS. Using a short story to portray the idea of the GPS would be more efficient because it would grasp the attention of the audience, making them more interested about the topic.A short story was chosen for this project instead of a poster or any other form to present because this way it will be easier to catch the readers attention. By using a sA short story, the many ideas about the GPS can be creative and make the situation more enjoyablefun. Imagination is unlimited within a short story and the story can be fictional.There is no need to be completely honest in a short story, either. You are really able to branch out and show creativityuse imagination. With a poster, the only thing to do is draw a picture and that becomes difficult to get the main point across to the audience while trying to catch their attention as well. The main audience for this short story is middle school and high school students. This is the chosen audience because they will just start to become familiar with driving if they havent already. The short story should be to their advantage. This short story will help students learn the importance of a GPS and become familiar with the features of one while providing entertainment as well. The TomTom is an extremely popular GPS in todays society. Through personal experiences, the TomTom is a type of GPS that is on the market, today. It does not seem to give accurate directions. This was detected through personal experiences. The fact that the directions are not given very accurately helped with the idea of what the short story is going to be about. The purpose behind the short story pertains to the GPS being somewhat unreliable. The short story is intended to be funny and of course, fiction. The GPS in the short story gives very accurate directions, but it might not necessarily be where you need to go. This very rare GPS reads minds and tends to carry on a conversation! Like I mentioned before, the GPS will
Comment [BC10]: Look through this paragraph to find what doesnt belong with the idea of a short story. Once you take that out, work on giving your ideas more succinctly. This will help with transitions as well. Comment [BC9]: This paragraph is mostly summary. Split up this paragraph according to idea so you can discuss each at length.

Price 4 have all of the features that the iPhone has, including making. A a phone call can still be made and and playing games! games can still be played! The intentions that are expected of the short story is to let the students know that they can never get lost and how important it is to own a GPS. The viewers should expect to become more knowledgeable in knowing about a GPS when they finish reading the short story. They will also gain knowledge in the iPhone and learn how the features in the iPhone and the GPS are the same. Anyone who reads this short story should not expect every GPS to be like the one in the story. In reality, a GPS cannot read your mind and reroute you to where you really want to go without typing in the actual address. It would be extremely cool if a GPS could read minds, but that could result in a problem for some people. They could be thinking about somewhere they would like to go, but not necessarilyreally want to show up at that specific place! Hopefully, the audience is extremely entertained throughout the reading of this short story. As mentioned above, the story will not represent a normal GPS because it will be able to talk and read minds. The rules are going to be somewhat bent. Therefore, the story is not going to be a true story. The advantage of presenting this new genre will help students become familiar with ways that they can actually get around if they are not good with directions. As expected, students who receive their license do not realize that they may not know the way to their local walmart. A GPS will seriously save them from getting lost (if they use it correctly). A disadvantage of this short story would be if a student is aware of a GPS and cannot afford one. That could be a bit of a challenge for the student to face. A GPS tends to be very high tech and expensive. It takes a lot of patience to learn how to work one. Another disadvantage with writing a short story is not knowing if it will really catch the readers attention. It is very likely for the audience to become
Comment [BC12]: Informal Comment [BC11]: Although you see the ideas in this paragraph relating, the way you present them does not allow your reader to see that as well. Work on giving a more focused intro sentence and a tighter paragraph.

Price 5 bored with the story and not see the true point behind the short story, which is to teach people the importance of a GPS. Many people already own or know everything about a GPS. This would not help the outcome of the short story because no one would be interested in reading it. They would already know everything they needed to know about the GPS. In all honestly, this short story is going to really help some newly experienced drivers who get lost oftenvery easily. It is going to be a fun way of learning and that is whats important. Whether or not a lot of people will gain knowledge from this story cannot be determined. What is known is that someone somewhere will gain something to theirhis or her advantage after reading this story. It was difficult deciding what the iPhone was going to be recreated into, but now it seems like everything has come together perfectly!
Comment [BC13]: Rather than focusing on you at the end of your paper, focus on the main idea of your defense. Comment [BC14]: Jenna, You have a great short story, and you certainly work toward presenting your ideas well in your defense paper. In order to streamline those ideas, I would suggest that you work to take out any unnecessary information, combine sentences, and keep your paragraphs focused. This will help you convey your ideas in a more succinct manner, and it will also help you find different ways to incorporate transitions. Let me know if youd like any help with your revisions. Im looking forward to seeing what youll do in your portfolio! -Ms. C